2022年新高考英语读后续写押题与评分标准精析-2.docx

1、2022年新高考英语读后续写押题与评分标准精析2前言：根据国家教育部提出“弘扬中华文化，成就立德树人”的教育任务，全国卷英语命题的方向也随之而变化，多年来，题目的选材一直致力于中华文化的宣扬，而从今天八省联考的选材可以看出，题目命题方向更偏向于立德树人的思路。本文将以精选广东省各地区第二次模拟测试素材，按照最新的评分标准从任务解读，读写要求方面进行详细分析。金牌押题1Once there was a little girl named Emily. Although her singing was very pleasant to hear, lacking courage, she neve

2、r dared to sing in front of strangers. One summer, the neighborhood where she lived would hold a singing competition. Her best friend, Lucy, came to invite her to participate in the competition, but Emily said, “I am afraid to take part in it.” Her mother said, “Its okay. Just do it bravely.” Emily

3、followed her moms advice and decided to give herself a try. The day came. Emily and Lucy went to the competition site. But she was too timid(胆小的) to walk onto the stage. She had been waiting until others finished singing. She shakily forced herself to stand on the stage. She started to sing, but her

4、 voice was so low. Whats worse, she was so nervous that she forgot the lyrics(歌词) after singing a few words. Being laughed at by others, embarrassed and shy, she ran away from the stage.Some naughty boys ran after her and said, “Emily, coward(胆小鬼)! Emily, coward!” Emily didnt argue with them. What s

5、he wanted was to go back home as quickly as she could. Finally, she rushed into the house, hugged her mom and cried sadly.“Well, my poor girl. Dont cry. Tell me what happened to you,” asked her mom. Emily looked up at her mother and told her what she had experienced.Listening to her, her mom cupped

6、her face and said, “It doesnt matter, girl. As long as you practice singing more in front of strangers, you will become braver little by little. So, my girl, dont be beaten by a failure. You can go out to practice singing every day. No matter who is listening to you, go on singing and never stop. I

7、believe there will be a harvest for you.”注意：1. 续写的词数应为 150 左右。 2. 请按照如下格式在答题卡相应位置作答。Paragraph 1:Emily listened to her mother carefully and followed her suggestion. _Paragraph 2:The next year, the neighborhood held the singing competition again. _1任务解读本测试读后续写试题所选故事的主题语境为“自我成长”和“家庭之爱”，内容综合指向做 人的自我成长中面

8、临的问题，倡导个人成长要学会突破自我，体现“成长中充满困难，困难中突破呈增长的”科学发展观。题目要求学生续写故事的发展（重在讲述Mike如何抵制来自雪糕的诱惑，把成功正确归因到自己身努力），并补全故事的结局（重在讲述突破自己后的Mike取得的优越成绩）。2. 续写要求通过阅读原文，准确把握并提取短文主要情节和关键信息，思考情节走向。具体包括：1）故事主要情节与走向 Mike 是一名游泳健将，但总是把成功归因于幸运雪糕，但雪糕不但不是成功的因素反而导致了他的发胖，他必须戒掉雪糕重新恢复状态并赢得比赛。2） 人物分析主人公：Mike: 特征：自信但自欺欺人，肩负父母的希望其他人物：父母： 尊重孩子

9、，友善人物分析方法（通过人物的动作，神态，心理，对话，环境等几个要求进行分析）l “Mike”的分析动作：1. Mike took the last bite of the chocolate ice cream and jumped into the car with his parents. . (para. 1) 2. A week later, it was time for another swim meet and Mike decided to eat the same ice cream. 3. He thought that it was his luck ice cream

10、 and that it might help him win again.体现特征：对幸运雪糕的依恋心理活动：1. When his race came up, Mike was confident. (para. 2) 2. Mike was feeling pretty good. Several months passed and Mike was feeling unbeatable.(para.3)体现特征: 自信3.Although he wouldnt admit it, all the ice cream was adding pounds to his athletic s

11、wimmers build.father had called for a taxi? (para. 2)3. He knew what was wrong. But he couldnt admit it to himself and especially to his parents. He did not want to disappoint them.（para 4）5.Mike unwillingly agreed.（续写第一段开头）体现特征: 自欺欺人，肩负起网l “父母”的分析“Congratulations, said his father. His mother gave h

12、im a hug, even though he was wet. One day, his mother sat down at the table with him and said, “Mike, we know you love ice cream，but maybe its not healthy for your body to eat so much of it. Your father and 1 think it is making you gain weight. Is it OK for us to quit the sweet treats for a while, e

13、specially before you go for the final competition? In order to strengthen your muscles, your father will go running with you three days a week. We think it will help you feel better.”（para. 6）体现特征: 尊重孩子，关心孩子3） 分析矛盾冲突矛盾冲突类型主要分为：人物之间的冲突，人物自身情感需求与现实得不到满足的冲突。本文的冲突属于后者。Mike的冲突： 坚决认为幸运雪糕是好成绩的前提与雪糕其实为他带来了肥

14、胖的矛盾。肩负父母的期望与运动成绩下滑的矛盾4） 找到解决矛盾的对策，并在读写中体现（重点！重点！重点！）。在选择对策的时候，必须要符合人物分析时的特征，不能与“人设”相冲突。以本文为例：Mike需要解决成绩下滑的矛盾，重拾父母的希望，就必须进行锻炼。而进行锻炼必须抵制幸运雪糕带来的诱惑。因此在读写要求第一段，必须重点描述这点。而在Mike除了成功抵制雪糕赢得比赛后，还必须将成功正确归因到雪糕以外的其他点上（这点非常容易被忽略而影响主旨升华），这在第二段的读写要求中必须出现。3.范文与分析（范文1）Mike unwillingly agreed. Every other day, he wou

15、ld go running with his dad. He still went to the swim meets each week but he didnt do well. Seeing that it was really hard for Mike, his father sometimes couldnt help inviting Mike to get some of his luck ice cream. But he refused the sweet treat and continued running with his father.Finally the big

16、 competition of the season came. As he dived into the swimming pool, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as hard as he could. This race seemed much longer. When he finished the race, he felt really tired and was not sure what to expect. Suddenly he heard thundering cheers from the audience and

17、 saw his parents were smiling from ear to ear. His jaws dropped as he looked at the scores. He had beaten his own record, and everyone elses too. Mike realized he had won his race, without the help of his luck ice cream.【解析】【分析】通过所给文章，Mike自从在一次游泳比赛前吃完一个冰激凌赢得比赛之后，他认为那是他的幸运冰激凌，之后每次比赛前都吃一个。直到由于吃多冰激凌，他体

18、重增加，比赛成绩也越来越落后，他的父母建议他停止吃冰激凌并且在父亲的陪同下开始锻炼。【详解】1.段落续写：由第一段首句内容“Mike不情愿地答应了。”可知，第一段可描写Mike停止吃冰激凌并且开始锻炼的详细情况。由第二段首句内容“最后，本赛季最重要的比赛来了。”可知，第二段可描写在坚持锻炼之后，Mike在本赛季最重要的比赛中的表现和结果。2.续写线索：开始锻炼坚持参加比赛赢得比赛感悟3.词汇激活行为类继续做某事：continue doing sth./go on doing sth.完成：finish/complete 打败：beat/defeat情绪类幸运：luck/fortune期待：ex

19、pect/look forward to【点睛】高分句型1 As he dived into the swimming pool, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as hard as he could.（由连接词as引导的时间状语从句）高分句型2 Mike realized he had won his race, without the help of his luck ice cream.（省略that的宾语从句）高分句型3 When he finished the race, he felt really tired and was

20、not sure what to expect.（when引导的时间状语从句）2.范文与分析二（来自于本小编） Mike unwillingly agreed.The next day, he began running with his father.He had thought that he can run swiftly and relaxedly but soon the result proved to be out of his expections.(体现Mike的自信与现在体力下降的矛盾） He found his fatigue was worsening, sweat c

21、oming out from his back. At that moment,filling his mind was the bite of his luck ice cream.（雪糕的诱惑，带来问题）Of course, he was missing its magic but he surely knew that he could not do anything to let down anyone, both to his parents or himself. （抵制雪糕的诱惑的过程）His father seemed understand and encouraged his

22、 son, “Come on ,Mike! We know what you are going through , but just believe what you are engaging will pay off! Lets make it!” The inspiring words from his father ,adding the dream to be the top again , fulfilled Mikes body gain. He carried on on the following days and things soon became improved.(体

23、现父母的爱） Finally the big competition of the season came. Mike got out of his parents car and went near to the swimming pool. This time , he put his ice cream behind and remained full of confidence. He jumped into the water the moment he heard the signal, stretching out his hands and finally touched th

24、e final wall with a sharp turn.（赢得比赛，获得好结果） He was the first again without any doubt. His parents rushed and hugged his wet body in no time. The warmth of family love melt in the stadium and Mike had to admit that only hard work and family love but not the ice cream had brought him success.（结尾必须升华主旨

25、，正确的成功归因，完成突破）词汇激活：1.He found his fatigue was worsening, sweat coming out from his back. 词语累积： worsen 变差 ，使用原文词语 sweat 汗使用谓语+非谓语的动作链 worsen + coming out 2.Of course, he was missing its magic but he surely knew that he could not do anything to let down anyone, both to his parents or himself. 词语累积 mis

26、s 思念 let down 让人失望使用原文的原词 magic 还有同意转换let down = disppoint 4.“Come on, Mike! We know what you are going through , but just believe what you are engaging will pay off! Lets make it!”词语累积： go through 经历 engage in 从事 pay off 获取汇报 make it 使.成功模仿原文说话语气。5.This time , he put his ice cream behind and remain

27、 full of confidence. He jumped into the water the moment he heard the signal, streching out his hands and finally touched the final wall with a sharp turn.词语累积：put sth behind把.抛之脑后 stretch out 伸出 sharp turn 快速转身6. Mike had to admit that only hard work and family love but not the ice cream had brough

28、t him success.Only .but not. .只有.而不是.金牌押题2 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Maria was practicing with her soccer mates in a tiny school yard. They were all from River Edge Rockers, a soccer team of their community. Suddenly, the ball flew into a deep hole at the edge of the yard. It was the thir

29、d time that they had lost their ball this month. Without the ball Maria had to wave goodbye to her mates and went home, depressed. If only there were a regulation soccer field! she thought.That evening, seeing her in low spirits, her father asked, What was the matter, dear?“I was just thinking about

30、 playing in a brand new soccer field! Maria answered.Her father smiled and said, Tomorrow, a Town Council meeting is to be held to discuss about the use of that vacant（空着的）lot next to the pet store, Home for Pets. Why not take this opportunity to convince them we need a better field?The next day, wi

31、th the company of her father, Maria and her teammates went to the meeting hall. On their arrival they saw Councilwoman Jill and some citizens already there. They took their seats. After Jill announced the start of the discussion, Maria stood up and spoke first. Up till now there is no soccer field i

32、n our community, which certainly affects our physical health. Our team currently have to practice in a tiny school yard, and only when its not already booked.Mrs. Lorries, owner of the pet store, commented, I couldnt agree more. Kids do need such a field. The Rockers applauded excitedly and the othe

33、r citizens all agreed it would be a way out.A soccer field would be a good use for that lot with overgrown weeds and some large rocks, but to build such one would need a small sum of money and maybe you even need to do all the work on your own. Councilwoman Jill smiled, Can you manage it?Thinking fo

34、r a while, Maria nodded with a determined look on her face, The Rockers can do it! We will turn it into a soccer field. The teammates all cheered.1 续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para l: The following day, the team got together to share ideas for raising money. Para 2: A week later, the team gathe

35、red at the lot, carrying tools purchased with their earnings. 1任务解读本测试读后续写试题所选故事的主题语境为“团队合作”，内容综合指向做 团队在分工合作下完成挑战，倡导团队之间必须进行合理分工，体现“团队合作解决困难，体现友爱”社会发展观。题目要求学生续写故事的发展（重在讲述足球队如何分工筹钱，并用筹到的前来新建新球场），并补全故事的结局（新球场的简称与成功的体会）。3. 续写要求通过阅读原文，准确把握并提取短文主要情节和关键信息，思考情节走向。具体包括：1）故事主要情节与走向 Maria 所在的足球队Edge Rockers面临

36、没有新球场困境，通过努力征得市政会的同意，然后在团队分工努力筹钱，买工具建球场的故事。2）人物分析主人公：Maris与她的足球队: 特征：有渴望，主动争取，团队气氛融洽其他人物：Councilwoman Jill ： 支持孩子的想法，负责任Mrs. Lorries：关爱社会，关爱孩子人物分析方法（通过人物的动作，神态，心理，对话，环境等几个要求进行分析）l “Maris”的分析Maria had to wave goodbye to her mates and went home, depressed. If only there were a regulation soccer field!

37、 she thought.(para 1)“I was just thinking about playing in a brand new soccer field! Maria answered.体现特征: 对新球场的渴望 After Jill announced the start of the discussion, Maria stood up and spoke first. Up till now there is no soccer field in our community, which certainly affects our physical health. Our

38、team currently have to practice in a tiny school yard, and only when its not already booked.体现特征: 据理力争 ，有理有据Thinking for a while, Maria nodded with a determined look on her face, The Rockers can do it! We will turn it into a soccer field. The teammates all cheered.体现特征: 团队气氛良好l “其他人”的分析Mrs. Lorries,

39、 owner of the pet store, commented, I couldnt agree more. Kids do need such a field. The Rockers applauded excitedly and the other citizens all agreed it would be a way out.A soccer field would be a good use for that lot with overgrown weeds and some large rocks, but to build such one would need a s

40、mall sum of money and maybe you even need to do all the work on your own. Councilwoman Jill smiled, Can you manage it?体现特征: 尊重孩子，热心负责3）分析矛盾冲突矛盾冲突类型主要分为：人物之间的冲突，人物自身情感需求与现实得不到满足的冲突。本文的冲突属于后者。本文的冲突相对明显： Maria和球队对新球场的需要以及缺少建球场资金的矛盾。4）找到解决矛盾的对策，并在读写中体现（重点！重点！重点！）。在选择对策的时候，必须要符合人物分析时的特征，不能与“人设”相冲突。以本文为例：

41、本文解决矛盾的手法较为开放性，主要分内两部：筹钱和建房子，只要过程中，能体现出主人公团队热心，有渴望以及团队分工明确则可。对策较为多样化，例如，筹钱可以通过卖报纸，摆摊位，送货或者宠物店帮忙（与lorris 联系）等等方法。第一段续写要求写筹钱的方法，而第二段着重写建房子带来的困难与解决（例如，在草从新等）3.范文与分析（范文1）参考范文1：The following day, the team got together to share ideas for raising money. Performances, car wash and even a candy sale were sug

42、gested but none seemed practical. Suddenly Maria cried excitedly, Maybe we can convince Mrs. Lorries to offer us some jobs in the pet shop. All her teammates agreed it was a great idea as it would not only raise enough money but could afford them good time with cute dogs. Things turned out as they h

43、ad expected. The following days witnessed their efforts feeding, washing and walking dogs and they were handsomely rewarded. (82)A week later, the team gathered at the lot, carrying tools purchased with their earnings. Seeing the field covered with dirt, rubble, and weeds, Maria kicked into action w

44、ith her teammates, scooping up debris and depositing it in a rented truck. Then they removed the large rocks together from the field and filled the holes left by the rocks with enough soil. After they planted grass on it, they were enthralled by the new field. We made it. Together we turned a rough

45、lot into our dream soccer field. Maria exclaimed, bursting with pride. (79)参考范文 2:The following day, the team got together to share ideas for raising money. One idea after another popped up, all of which sounded practical. So they divided themselves into several groups and were each assigned to one

46、particular task. One undertook the newspaper-delivering in the neighborhood, and one group were up to taking care of the gardens for the busy neighbors. Amazingly, Maria managed to find a job at the pet store, where she would feed, walk and wash the dogs. Money seemed to roll in, but it was still fa

47、r from enough. To make up for the difference, the Rockers organized a charity performance in the community, asking for donations to the soccer field. Their efforts finally paid off and a soccer field of their own was on the way. (118)A week later, the team gathered at the lot, carrying tools purchas

48、ed with their earnings. Overgrown weeds and large rocks were really a challenge for these soccer enthusiasts, but with the dream of a soccer field in mind, they immediately set out to work. The next few days witnessed the group removing the overgrown weeds and digging out the large rocks from the lo

49、t and having them taken away. After smoothing the field with the soil brought somewhere else, they took one step further by planting grass on it. With all the work done, a soccer field of their own was finally born. Looking at the field, the teammates exchanged an understanding smile, imagining them

50、selves sending the ball through the air, and toward the goal! (110)【金牌精练】Once there was a little girl named Emily. Although her singing was very pleasant to hear, lacking courage, she never dared to sing in front of strangers. One summer, the neighborhood where she lived would hold a singing competi

51、tion. Her best friend, Lucy, came to invite her to participate in the competition, but Emily said, “I am afraid to take part in it.” Her mother said, “Its okay. Just do it bravely.” Emily followed her moms advice and decided to give herself a try. The day came. Emily and Lucy went to the competition

52、 site. But she was too timid(胆小的) to walk onto the stage. She had been waiting until others finished singing. She shakily forced herself to stand on the stage. She started to sing, but her voice was so low. Whats worse, she was so nervous that she forgot the lyrics(歌词) after singing a few words. Bei

53、ng laughed at by others, embarrassed and shy, she ran away from the stage.Some naughty boys ran after her and said, “Emily, coward(胆小鬼)! Emily, coward!” Emily didnt argue with them. What she wanted was to go back home as quickly as she could. Finally, she rushed into the house, hugged her mom and cr

54、ied sadly.“Well, my poor girl. Dont cry. Tell me what happened to you,” asked her mom. Emily looked up at her mother and told her what she had experienced.Listening to her, her mom cupped her face and said, “It doesnt matter, girl. As long as you practice singing more in front of strangers, you will

55、 become braver little by little. So, my girl, dont be beaten by a failure. You can go out to practice singing every day. No matter who is listening to you, go on singing and never stop. I believe there will be a harvest for you.”注意：1. 续写的词数应为 150 左右。 2. 请按照如下格式在答题卡相应位置作答。Paragraph 1:Emily listened to her mother carefully and followed her suggestion. _Paragraph 2:The next year, the neighborhood held the singing competition again._