[13903354]04 不同文体写作评析-2020年中考英语必背书面表达【学科网名师堂】.docx

1、04 不同文体写作评析 中考英语书面表达必背初中优秀作文评析：提示作文你校与加拿大某中学结成姊妹学校，加方校刊来信了解你校的课外活动情况及你们的建议，请你根据下面表格中提供的内容用英语写一篇80词左右的短文。文章的开头已给出（不计入总词数）生词：兴趣小组interest group英语角English corner活动activity (n.)活动时间450 p.m550p.m主要内容1体育类（篮球、足球等）2兴趣小组（绘画、歌舞、电脑等）3英语角（周三下午）建议1增加课外活动时间2减少作业量Id like to tell you something about the out-of clas

2、s activities in our school.参考范文We usually have our activities from 450550 in the afternoon. Wehave different kinds of activities. Some students are interested in sports. They play basketball and football. We also have some interest groups, such as drawing, singing and dancing. And now, computer is t

3、he most popular. On Wednesday afternoon we go to English corner. We like talking in English there. We hope we can spend more time on such activities and less time on homework.名师点评根据题目要求。这是一篇说明性质的书面表达，要介绍的是课外活动的时间、内容及自己的建议。首先要做到的是细读表格，明确要点。在行文时要注意表达举行课外活动要用have activities，表达起止时间要用from. to，在表达这三种主要活动内

4、容时，为使行文流畅，最好加进we have different kinds of activities（我们举行不同种类的课外活动）这样一句话。紧接着要过渡到说明体育类（篮球、足球），如果表达出“有些学生从事体育活动（have sports）”或“有些学生热衷于（are interested in.）”就较好。至于说打篮球、踢足球较容易表达出来，可以直接表达They play basketball and football，也可以表达成Basketball and football are the most popular.要表达“兴趣小组”时，注意用提示词interest groups，要表

5、达兴趣小组的三种内容，最好用例如（such as.），三种内容作为名词来表达时要注意用动名词形式（drawing, singing, dancing）。在表达英语角时注意用提示词English corner，“在周三”注意用介词on。在表达“建议”时，用自己熟悉的词hope，要表达“增加时间”，“减少量”，此时要注意到同一意义可有不同的表达方式，如转换成“在课外活动上多花时间”“在作业上少花点时间”的表达形式，与原意保持一致且与自己所学内容较贴近而不大容易出错，“在方面花时间”注意用短语spend.on。提示的要点往往是非常简略的，要使行文流畅、自然，需适当加进一些话，另外当不能直接表达出需要

6、表达的意义时，要考虑用自己熟悉的又不会改变意义的另一种表达形式，须知同一意义可以有很多种的表达方式。初中优秀作文评析：自由作文一、Write eight or more sentences about the season you like best.内容要点：1四个季节中任选一个季节。2被选季节的特点（气候、时间、事物、活动等）。3人们在此季节所从事的活动。4作者自己喜爱的活动和感受。参考范文I like winter best. Though it is very cold, it is good for skating. I often go skating on Sundays wit

7、h my father. When it snows, everything turns white. Trees and houses are covered with thick snow. How beautiful the world looks! My friends and I like to make snowmen. Sometimes we make snowballs and throw them at each other. Thats a very interesting game. I like winter holiday very much because the

8、 Spring Festival is the happiest time of the year.点评：这是一篇描写季节的文章，文章难度一般。要求从自己的角度描写季节和感受季节。应注意以下几个问题：(1)确定全文的时态。此文一般选用一般现在时。(2)除了对季节的描述，一定要有自己的见解，这是得分的重要内容和关键所在。作者用流畅的语言描述了冬天的景色。全文意思表达清楚，结构紧密。二、Write about what you are going to do after you leave school.参考范文When I finish school, I want to be a teache

9、r. Though teachers are poorly paid and they have no power, teachers are kind, respectable and learned, like angels. They lead the pathway to succeed. Its quite sure that teachers are very important in modern world. We cant develop our country without knowledge. Teachers teach us knowledge. I like al

10、l of my teachers in my school. I would like to be an English teacher. Its very important for the students to learn English well today. Ill try my best to be an ideal teacher. My students can make our country better in the future.点评：这是一篇阐述观点的议论文，作者用简洁而流畅的语言表达了长大后想成为一名老师的愿望。论据充分，观点明确，并且字里行间渗透了对祖国的无比热爱

11、之情和把祖国建设更加美好的决心。三、请以My.为题写一篇短文。要求：有时间、地点、人物，字数不少于80个单词。My Mothers BirthdayMy mother is busy. Shealways busy works. (1) She often forgets her birthday.Last Sunday was my mothers birthday. I invited several friends to have a birthday party for her.It was five oclock. Everything was ready. The candles

12、were on the cake. When my mothercame back to home(2), she was verysurprise(3). She asked, “Whose birthday is it today?” We said, “Happy birthday to you!” She was very happy. At that time Lily gave my mother a nice present and said, “I hope you will like it” “ Thank you. Can I open it now?” My mother

13、 asked.“Certainly.” Lily said. “Oh, its a toy panda.How(4) a beautiful panda!” my mother said.Meimei asked us, “Would you likesinging?”(5) “Yes,we would love.”(6) We said. We all sang with my mother.That night my mother sang and danced like a little girl. She lookedmore(7) younger than before.（1）把al

14、ways busy works改为 is always busy working，因为busy是形容词作表语，“忙于做某事”应该用be busy doing形式来表示。（2）要把to去掉。home在此句中是副词，不需要加to。（3）本句surprise在系动词之后，要把surprise改成 surprised。surprise具有名词、动词词性，其形容词有两个，他们分别是 surprised 和surprising，其中前者多用来指人，后者多用来指事。（4）把how改成 what。在感叹句中how是用来修饰形容词或副词的，而what是用来修饰名词的。名词前可以有其他定语，单数可数名词前记住要加

15、上 a或an。（5）把singing改成to sing some songs, Would you like后接动词时要加to。（6）在love后面加上to。对“Would you like ?”问句的肯定回答应为would like (love)后加 to，因为这是口语中动词不定式的省略，也就是说to后面的动词短语省略了。（7）把more改成much，因为more不能用来修饰比较级。能够用来修饰比较级的有：a little, a bit, much, rather，far和even等。学生习作点评：本文的小作者开篇就写出母亲的繁忙，为母亲忘了自己的生日和自己为她准备生日晚会做了铺垫，同时也教

16、育了那些为了自己过生日讲究排场的同学，这也是本文的成功之处。另外小作者能够把学过的词汇、语法灵活地运用到本文中去，这也是值得我们学习的，不过还需要在个别词语用法上多下功夫。初中优秀作文评析：应用文写作一、假如你的名字叫王磊，你有一位美国朋友杰克(Jack)今年暑假要到西安来参观，你写信告诉他，你住在西安市南大街65号，从火车站乘10路公共汽车到历史博物馆下车。到时你将在车站等他。此信写于2004年5月1日。注意：(1)数不得少于50个。(2)求意思完整，语句连贯。参考范文Xian, ChinaMay 1st, 2004Dear Jack:Im very glad to hear that yo

17、ull come to visit Xian this summer holiday. Now I would like to tell you how to get to my house. I live at 65 the South Street, Xian. When you arrive in Xian by train (or by plane), you can catch (take) the No. 10 bus and get off at the History Museum. Ill wait for you there.Yours,Wang Lei点评：完成这道书面表

18、达题应从以下几个方面着手考虑：首先，这道题属于书信文件，所以应注意书信的正确格式。其次从提示的内容来看，主要是说王磊的一位美国朋友杰克于暑假要来西安参观，王磊写信告诉他行走的路线及到时在车站等他等细节，应采用一般现在时和将来时态来叙述。最后，同学们应结合所给的主要内容，用所学过的词（组）及句型来完成此文。参观visit今年暑假this summer holiday想要would like to do到达 get to/arrive at/reach乘坐公共汽车 catch/take a bus下车 get off二、假如你叫Han Meimei，你的笔友Mary现在上海三中学习。她邀请你去参加

19、聚会。请你用英语给Mary写一封信。信的要点如下：(1)你很抱歉，不能去。(2)你母亲病了，医生叫她卧床几日。你要照料母亲。(3)谢谢寄来的漂亮的明信片(postcard)，很喜欢，将放在书桌上。注意：(1)信要通顺、连贯。(2)词数60字左右。信的开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。(3)如写不下，可写在横线下空白处。No.3 Middle SchoolShanghaiApril 20, 2004Dear Mary,Thank you very much for inviting (邀请) me to your party._Give my best wishes to your famil

20、y.Yours,Han Meimei参考范文No.3 Middle SchoolShanghaiApril 20, 2004Dear Mary,Thank you very much for inviting me to your party. I am very sorry, but I cant come. My mother is ill. The doctor has told her that she should stay in bed for several days. Ill take care of my mother. Thank you very much for sen

21、ding me such a beautiful postcard. I like it very much. I am going to put it on my desk.Could I hear from you soon?Give my best wishes to your family.Yours,Han Meimei点评：利用所学英语知识和题目所给材料写一封英文信。通读全文，可较详细地列出要点：(1)你很抱歉，不能去(2)原因是母亲生病了(3)医生嘱其卧床几日(4)你必须照料母亲(5)谢谢寄来的明信片，很喜欢(6)明信片放在桌上要注意的是：内容要点不遗漏；时态、语态正确；句子结构

22、正确；符合英文信的格式；单词拼写正确；语句通顺，上下文连贯；字数在60左右。通过以上分析，再着手开始写，一定会写出一封符合题意要求的英文信来。三、Miss Jo Hunt和Lily是好朋友。Lily给Jo写信，告诉她自己和双胞胎妹妹在中国学习和生活的情况，并询问对方的汉语学习情况及是否能来中国。要求：写一篇100词左右的信。学生习作March 5th，2004Dear Jo:How are you? I havent heardofyou for a long time.Id liketellyou something about our school life in China. Now w

23、e are students of No.4 Middle School. Were in the same grade, Grade Two, but in differentclass. Im in Class 1, but Lucy is in Class 4. We go to school five days a week. Every morning, we leave homeafter a quick breakfast. Classes begin at eight oclock in the morning. We have four classes in the morn

24、ing and three classes in the afternoon. We have lunch at school because wealllike Chinese food very much.Our favorite food is dumplings. School is over at about 3 in the afternoon. After school we have sports on the playground. We have made friends with a lot of Chinese children. We teach them Engli

25、sh and they teachourChinese. Now we can speak and write a little in Chinese. What about you? Bythe way, when are you coming to China? Please write to me soon.Love from: Lilyfrom，“收到某人的信”应为hear from。to tell，正确的说法是“would like sb. to do sth.”classes，既然在不同班级，应该用复数形式。both，all表示三者以上的人或物，both表示二者。us，此处应用宾格

26、形式。点评：本文从句子结构到语言能力的表达都很不错。思路清晰，行文流畅。正确地运用了动词时态，但是大小写及动词搭配还要多加练习。日记的写作方法!赢在中考，点点知中考英语5月31日英语写作能力不强是中学生普遍存在的问题，因此我们为大家全新打造“写作指导”专栏，旨在通过引导、启发、参与的写作训练来帮助同学们攻克英语写作难题。本栏目以写作任务为依托，不仅关注写作结果，更关注写作过程。我们衷心希望通过定基调列提纲、写句子巧衔接添佳句成篇章这样科学的思路点拨、学法指导，让同学们在有序的练习中学会方法，在品味优秀范文中形成审美及用英语思维的能力。我们会为大家连载10期，同学们，和我们一起，满怀信心地开启写

27、作之旅吧。【写作任务】为了提高英语写作能力，你养成了用英语记日记的习惯。假如你和你的家人在四月八号这天参观了北京，请你把这天的经历及感受记录下来。提示：1.早上：参观颐和园(爬万寿山；在昆明湖划船)2.中午：吃北京烤鸭3.下午：逛王府井大街参考词汇：颐和园the Summer Palace；万寿山Longevity Hill；昆明湖Kunming Lake；王府井大街Wangfujing Street；风景scenery【思路点拨】1.定基调体裁：应用文(日记)；日记的主体部分为记叙文时态：谈过去的经历时，用一般过去时。人称：写个人经历时，用第一人称。2.列提纲、写句子列提纲写句子人物、旅行目

28、的地及天气(1) My family and I _(到达) Beijing early in the morning.(2) It _(晴朗).旅行经历早上(3) We _(参观了颐和园).(4) We _(爬万寿山) and _(欣赏美丽的风景).(5) We _(在昆明湖划船).中午(6) We _(吃了一些特色食物) like Beijing duck.(7) It _(美味).下午(8) We _(去了王府井大街).(9) I _(买了一些有趣的东西) for my friends.感受(10) We _(过得很愉快).3.巧衔接写作的评分标准之一是文章是否连贯，因此想让文章连贯的方

29、法之一就是学会恰当地使用一些衔接词。本文中，可用in the morning (早上)、at noon (中午)、in the afternoon (下午)表示事件发生的时间顺序；可用first(首先)、after that (那之后)表示行程的先后顺序；可用in a word (总之)来总结旅行的感受。4.添佳句What delicious food it was!5.成篇章Saturday, April 8th_参考答案2.列提纲、写句子(1) arrived in /got to(2) was sunny / fine / nice(3) visited the Summer Palac

30、e(4) climbed Longevity Hill; enjoyed the beautiful scenery(5) went boating on Kunming Lake(6) ate something special(7) was delicious(8) went to Wangfujing Street(9) bought something interesting (10) had a good /great / fun time / had fun5.成篇章Saturday, April 8thMy family and I arrived in Beijing earl

31、yin the morning. It was sunny. We visited the Summer Palace. Its really big and beautiful.FirstWe climbed Longevity Hill and enjoyed the beautiful scenery at the top of the hill.After that, we went boating on Kunming Lake. It was really relaxing.At noon, we ate something special like Beijing duck. W

32、hat delicious food it was!In the afternoon, we went to Wangfujing Street. I bought something interesting for my friends.In a word, my family and I had a fun time.初中优秀作文评析：看图作文看图写话根据所给图示，以“Wang Leis Busy Day”为题，写一篇不少于50字的短文，内容必须符合图意，语意连贯，句式规范，字迹工整。（正文第一句已给出）Wang Leis Busy DayIt was March 8th yesterda

33、y._参考范文It was March 8th yesterday. It was Womens Day. Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother. He went shopping and bought much food. Then he cleaned the room. He did his best to do some cooking. When his mother came back after work, she was very happy. Wang Lei was very tired, but he felt pl

34、eased.（58个词）名师点评先“看准题意”：题目是Wang Leis Busy Day。写作要围绕王雷一天中所忙碌的事情的顺序展开。描述昨天的事应该用过去时。从题意理解中即可“规范格式”：本文用记叙文格式去写。再“按点组句”：（1）3月8日为妇女节。It was Womens Day.（2）王雷去商店购物。Wang Lei went shopping and bought much food.（3）王雷打扫卫生。He cleaned the room.（4）他烧饭。母亲回家很高兴。He did the cooking. When his mother came back, she was

35、very happy.完成组句后，“连句成段”，可加上句子间的衔接句子。如在（1）与（2）之间可加上Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother.在最后可再谈王雷一天的感受：He was very tired, but he felt happy.把这些句子连成段后，最后“通篇润色”。看图组句根据所给图画和提示词语，写出意思连贯、符合逻辑的四句话。每幅图只写一句话，所给提示词语必须都用上。（注意：只抄提示语不得分）提示：（1）It was Tree Planting Day yesterday.（2）early, morning, I, go,

36、in my old clothes.（3）we, help, each other, dig, hole, large enough, for, trees.（4）plant, some, along, school, playground.（5）from now on, water, tree, often, possible.看图作文根据图示，写一篇80词左右的短文。要求故事完整，句子通顺，内容与图片相符。参考词汇：newspaper (报纸)，bird (鸟)，nature (自然)参考范文One day my uncle was reading a newspaper and lear

37、ned that birds were our friends. We should get alone well with them. He looked at his nice bird in the cage, and decided to let it fly back homenature. He took the cage with the bird in it and went to a little hill near his house by bike. He went home with the empty cage. When he got back, he sat in

38、 a chair and had a rest. A moment later, to his surprise, he found the bird back in the cage.名师点评分析：该例四幅图画描述的是一位先生保护动物的故事，内容贴近考生的生活实际，有利于对考生进行保护生态平衡、保护地球环境的教育。内容要点是：（1）看报（Let Birds Fly）；（2）上山去放飞笼中鸟；（3）提着空笼返家；（4）惊奇地发现鸟儿重飞回笼。通过观图、分析、判断，列出了要点，可写草稿，再进行润色，注意运用简单的、熟悉的句型结构，检查要点有无遗漏，注意拼写、词汇、语法及搭配上是否有误。说明：看图

39、作文是从直观入手，通过观察、分析、理解，运用联想，将图画语言转换成书面文字的写作过程。答题的思路和方法如下：首先，观察图画，弄清故事梗概。仔细观察每幅图画的内容，抓住图中的主要情节，把握关键的信息与联系，诸如人物、时间、地点、动作等。其次，明确信息，编拟提纲。经过认真的观察和分析，我们掌握了每幅图的主要信息。为了在表达中不漏要点，可为每幅图配上一个提纲性的句子，即用一句话表达这幅画的大意，这几句话实际上就是短文的写作提纲。有了提纲，我们在写作过程中就能做到重点突出，有条理，不会离题。再次，依据图示、提纲，连句扩写成篇。连句成文时，要按照一定的顺序和图画间的关系，中间加上一些符合逻辑关系的过渡词

40、、句，从而使所写短文层次分明，内容连贯，浑然一体。同时注意尽可能运用简单易懂、自己熟悉的有把握的句型结构。最后，结合要求与图示，复查所写短文。写完短文后要检查格式、篇幅是否符合要求，文理是否通顺，要点有无遗漏，词汇、语法、搭配上是否有误，单词拼写有无错误等。初中优秀作文评析：记叙文1、根据中文意思和英文提示词语，写出意思连贯，符合逻辑的英文文段。所给英文提示词语必须都用上；每组英文提示所写的句数不限。彼得只有五岁，和他的祖母住在一起。一天他的祖母得了重感冒，彼得急得直哭，后来他(1) Peter, five(2) live, grandma(3) have, cold, worried, cr

41、y(4) idea, find, parents telephone number, call(5) news, hurry, home, hospital参考范文Peter is only five (years old). He lives with his grandma. One day his grandma had a cold. Peter was so worried that he began to cry. Then he had an idea. He found his parents telephone number and gave them a call. Whe

42、n his parents heard the news, they hurried back home and took Peters grandma to the hospital.名师点评根据中英文提示可理清需要进行表达的大致情节是：彼得只有五岁，他和他的祖母住在一起，一天他的祖母得了重感冒，他急得直哭。后来有了一个主意，他找到了他父母的电话号码，他打电话给了他们，当他的父母得知这一消息后迅速地赶回家，把祖母送进医院。须注意前面介绍的是一般情况用一般现在时，后面叙述的是过去发生的事用一般过去时。动词的运用及动词的时态是在进行书面表达时尤其要注意的。2、请根据下面所给李玲的个人小档案，以M

43、y good friend为题，写一篇英语短文，介绍李玲的基本情况。要求条理清楚，语句通顺，体现表中的全部内容，不得少于12句话。中文名：李玲英文名：Susan性别：女年龄：15祖籍：青海学校：第八中学年级：三班级：二特长：数学、英语爱好：唱歌、看电视、打排球优点：友好，善良，乐于助人，学习努力参考范文My Good FriendI have a good friend. Her Chinese name is Li Ling, and Susan is her English name. She is from Qinghai. Li Ling is fifteen years old. S

44、he studies in No. 8 Middle School. She is in Class Two, Grade Three. Li Ling is good at maths and English. She likes singing and playing volleyball very much. And she sings quite well. She likes watching TV, too. Li Ling is very kind and friendly. She studies very hard and always likes helping other

45、s. What a good girl she is! I like her!名师点评这是一篇记叙文，内容要交待清楚、全面，要注意中英文的表达习惯，如汉语中年级在前，班级在后，而英语正相反；首尾句要格外留意，要保持短文的完整性。(1)格式：人物介绍(2)人称：第三人称(3)时态：一般现在时(4)短语：have a good friend, English name, to be from, No. 8 Middle School, in Class Two, Grade Three, to be good at, like singing and playing, sing well, lik

46、e watching TV, study hard, what a good girl(5)句型：陈述句与感叹句3、根据中文意思和英文提示词语，写出意思连贯、符合逻辑的英文文段。所给的英文提示词语必须都用上，句数不限；中文提示内容不必逐句翻译。一个雨天，李莉乘出租车回家。在车里她发现司机在学英语。他对李莉说了些什么?此事对你学习英语有何启发?为支持北京奥运你打算做些什么?(1) one rainy day, go home, by taxi(2) in the car, find, was learning English(3) said to Li Li, I, weak, English,

47、 when at school, now work hard, to help with the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games(4) I think. to show support（n.支持）for the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games参考范文One rainy day, Li Li went home by taxi. In the car she found (that) the driver was learning English. He said to Li Li: I was weak in English when I was a

48、t school. Now Im working hard at it to help with the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games. I think I should learn from the driver. English is very important to us because it is widely used all over the world. As a student, Ill do my best to learn English well at school. And Im going to speak English as much as possible to show support for the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games.名师点评第一句很重要，以便确定全文时态。句与句之间要连贯。关键句要用上，如：Im going to speak English as much as possible to show support for the Beijing 2008 Olympic Games.(1)格式：简介(2)人称：第三人称(3)时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时(4)短语、句式、句型：短语与句式已给出，句型包括简单句、直接引语、宾语从句