备考2024届高考英语一轮复习 第二部分 读后续写 专题二 热考话题素材 7 社会温情.docx

1、热考话题7社会温情2022浙江改编I needed to do something in my community（社区） in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen， so I did， too. It seemed like a good thing to do.I thought that we would just be pas

2、sing out dinners to those in need， but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food， from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served， but already outside the building many homele

3、ss people were gathering. It wasnt until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.As the line of people came toward me， I got a little scared. Id come face to face with the homeless： How should I act？ How would they treat me？ Would they hate me for having more than t

4、hey did？ While some of the people looked very friendly， some of them looked so dangerous. I didnt have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned（分配） to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help， shed be right there， which I found quite comforting.I ha

5、d never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had totally given up on life， while others seemed to be making the best of the situation， smiling and joking. Some were better off than others，

6、 but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didnt have a place to call home and that the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.As they came in my direction， I put on my brightest and happiest smile.I was so happy that I ha

7、d earned my service hours in this way.人物文章涉及的人物有I，the homeless和the lady next to me。通过原文中的描述I plete the community service hours required to graduate As the line of people came toward me， I got a little scared和It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didnt have a place to call home可以看

8、出，我是一个务实、对无家可归的人既害怕又同情的学生，在续写部分可以通过描写我在近距离给无家可归的人分发食物后获得的感悟来体现人物的积极蜕变。情节及情感线为了完成高中毕业所要求的社区服务时间，我去了施粥所（感到开心和自豪）我发现准备过程中要做的事情很多（感到有些疲惫）开始施粥时，排队的人群靠近我（感到害怕）我看到这么多无家可归的人（同情他们，为他们感到难过）主题根据续写第二段提示语I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way可知，本文应该体现帮助别人、快乐自己的主题。续写第一段根据本段首句可知，本段主要讲我克服对无家可

9、归的人的恐惧和偏见，快乐地为他们分发食物，尾句衔接第二段提示语：我在施粥的过程中感受到快乐。本段主要通过动作和感受描写推动故事情节的发展。续写第二段根据本段首句可知，本段应该主要讲我对这次经历的感悟。结尾部分适当升华主题：帮助别人、给别人带去了快乐的同时也使自己快乐。1.They left with thanks.用friendly words of gratitude代替句中的thanks，增加用词的丰富性。They left with friendly words of gratitude.运用主语从句优化句，表现这群无家可归的人的友好举动给我带来的触动。What moved me mos

10、t was that they left with friendly words of gratitude.2.I felt happy.用形容词（tired， worn out）作状语，与happy形成对比，从而凸显帮助别人带来的快乐。Tired and worn out， I felt happy.用形象具体的情感表达替换happy，强调发自内心的快乐。Tired and worn out， I felt deep pleasure welling up from the bottom of my heart.为句增加原因状语，并用现在分词短语作状语，体现我的快乐来源，使行文更加顺畅自然。

11、Tired and worn out，seeing what I did make their day， I felt deep pleasure welling up from the bottom of my heart.3.We can actually comfort the poor people and lift our own spirits.利用not only.but also来升级句式，让表达更有层次。We can not only actually comfort the poor people， but also lift our own spirits.利用倒装结构，

12、升级句式表达，让句子更为亮眼。Not only can we actually comfort the poor people， but also we can lift our own spirits.Astheycameinmydirection，Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile. I found a lot of homeless people in need of something to eat were waiting in the queue（排队等候）. In the next few hours I was very busy giving

13、out the meat and other food items into their hands. And what moved me most was that they left with friendly words of gratitude（友好的感激之词） after getting food. Tired and worn out（筋疲力尽）， seeing what I did make their day， I felt deep pleasure welling up from the bottom of my heart（发自内心的快乐）.Iwassohappythat

14、Ihadearnedmyservicehoursinthisway. It was definitely a rewarding thing to do the community service！ Through this unforgettable experience， I earned something more valuable. To help the people in need is also a help to myself. By offering the voluntary assistance， not only can we actually comfort the poor people， but also we can lift our own spirits（振奋我们自己的精神）， which can help build a better world with warmth and friendliness for all of us. I would volunteer to help more people in the future.