2022年新高考英语读后续写押题与评分标准精析-1.docx

1、2022年新高考英语读后续写押题与评分标准精析1前言：根据国家教育部提出“弘扬中华文化，成就立德树人”的教育任务，全国卷英语命题的方向也随之而变化，多年来，题目的选材一直致力于中华文化的宣扬，而从今天八省联考的选材可以看出，题目命题方向更偏向于立德树人的思路。本文将以精选广东省各地区第二次模拟测试素材，按照最新的评分标准从任务解读，读写要求方面进行详细分析。2022年广州二模阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Twenty years ago, I drove a taxi. Once, I was called at 3 a.m. to pick so

2、meone up. When I arrived, the building was completely dark except for one light in a window. Often, many drivers would just honk (按喇叭) once or twice, wait a short minute, then drive away. But unless a real danger, I always went to the door to find the passenger. It might be someone who needed my ass

3、istance. Would I not want a driver to do the same if my mother or father had called for a taxi? So I walked to the door and knocked. “Just a minute,” answered a weak and elderly voice. I could hear the sound of something being dragged across the floor. After a long pause, the door opened. A small wo

4、man in her 80s stood before me. By her side was a small suitcase. “Would you carry my bag out to the car?” she said. “Id like a few moments alone. Then, if you could come back and help me? Im not very strong.” I took the suitcase to the cab, then returned to assist the woman. She took my arm, and we

5、 walked slowly toward the cab. She kept thanking me for my kindness. “Its nothing,” I told her. “I just try to treat my passengers the way I would want my mother treated.” “Oh, youre such a good boy,” she said. When we got in the taxi, she gave me an address. Then she asked, “Could you drive through

6、 the downtown?” “Its not the shortest way,” I answered. “I dont mind,” she said, “Im in no hurry. Im on my way to the nursing home.” I saw her eyes shining with tears. “I dont have any family left,” she continued. “The doctor says I am too old to live alone.” I quietly turned off the meter (计程器). “W

7、hat road do you want me to take?” I asked. “First, take me to Sunrise Street. Thats where I was born.” 注意： 1续写词数应为 150 左右； 2请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 For hours, we drove through the city. _“How much do I owe you?” she asked, reaching for her purse._1任务解读本测试读后续写试题所选故事的主题语境为“人与自我”和“人与社会”，内容综合指向做 人与做事和社会服务与人际

8、沟通，倡导个人设身处地关爱身边的长者，体现孟子“老吾老， 以及人之老”的道德观。题目要求学生续写故事的发展（重在讲述“我”应长者要求，花费了好几个小时，耐心地 将老人搭载到城市中对她具有特别意义的地点，缅怀旧事，并最终抵达养老院的情节），并 补全故事的结局（重在描述长者欲付车费，被我婉拒后的反应以及“我”的感悟或行动。2. 续写要求通过阅读原文，准确把握并提取短文主要情节和关键信息，思考情节走向。具体包括：1）故事主要情节与走向 “我”是一名热心的出租车司机。在一次旅程中，搭载一名体弱独居长者到养老院安享晚 年，通过搭载长者重游旧地，解开其心中的牵挂，并获得自我感悟。 2） 人物分析主人公：作

9、者“我” 身份：出租车司机 特征：热心助人，关爱长者 其他人物：独居女长者 特征：体弱，失去独立生活能力，需要到养老院安享晚年人物分析方法（通过人物的动作，神态，心理，对话，环境等几个要求进行分析）l “我”的分析动作：1. But unless a real danger, I always went to the door to find the passenger. (para. 2) 2. So I walked to the door and knocked. (para. 3) 体现特征：体贴待人 3. I took the suitcase to the cab, then re

10、turned to assist the woman. (para. 4) 体现特征： 服务态度良好 4. I quietly turned off the meter. (para. 7) 体现特征： 性格低调心理活动：1. It might be someone who needed my assistance. (para. 2) 体现特征: 有强大的同情心2. Would I not want a driver to do the same if my mother or father had called for a taxi? (para. 2)体现特征: 有同理心语言：1. “I

11、ts nothing,” I told her. “I just try to treat my passengers the way I would want my mother treated.” (para. 4) 体现特征: 有同理心，能推己及人2. “Its not the shortest way.” I answered. (para. 6) 体现特征: 诚实3. “What road do you want me to take?” I asked. (para. 7)体现特征: 尊重乘客l “老人家”的分析动作1. She took my arm, and we walked

12、 slowly toward the cab. (para. 4) 2. She kept thanking me for my kindness. (para. 4)体现特征：体弱，感恩外表1. A small woman in her 80s stood before me. (para. 3) 2. I saw her eyes shining with tears.(para. 6) 体现特征：体弱，悲伤语言 1. “Would you carry my bag out to the car?” she said. “Id like a few moments alone. Then,

13、 if you could come back and help me? Im not very strong.”(para. 3) 2. “Oh, youre such a good boy.” she said. (para. 5) 3. Then she asked, “Could you drive through the downtown?” (para. 5) 4. “I dont mind,” she said, “Im in no hurry. Im on my way to the nursing home.” (para. 6) 5. “I dont have any fa

14、mily left.” She continued. “The doctor says I am too old to live alone.” (para. 6) 6. “First, take me to Sunrise Street. Thats where I was born.” (para. 7)体现特征：孤独，感恩，不舍3） 分析矛盾冲突矛盾冲突类型主要分为：人物之间的冲突，人物自身情感需求与现实得不到满足的冲突。本文的冲突属于后者。我的冲突： 我作为一个夜班出租车司机，为了谋生与最后因为道德，不能收车费的矛盾。老人家的冲突：体弱必须到老人院与对过去和如今生活的留恋产生的悲伤与孤

15、独感。4） 找到解决矛盾的对策，并在读写中体现（重点！重点！重点！）。在选择对策的时候，必须要符合人物分析时的特征，不能与“人设”相冲突。以本文为例：老人家面临的冲突是因要到老人院而产生的不舍，因此要缓解这种不舍，我们可以选择的对策可以是：让作者陪她聊天，听她的分享经历。可以是载她一程的时候，做出一些友善的行为，例如放慢车速，或者放一些音乐等等。这正是续写第一段对学生要求。同时，当老人家支付车资的时候，作者的对策可以是：拒绝接收车资并解释，或者接收车资后，日后以其他方式返还老人家等。这正是续写第二段对学生的要求。另一方面，作者内心的矛盾，可以通过虽然收不到车资，但是获取得更宝贵的精神收获：帮到

16、人，达到作者心中“老吾老以及人之老”的道德亮点来取代物质支持。3. 范文与分析（来自于官方范文）For hours, we drove through the city. She showed me her primary school and shared with me some funny stories of her school days and friends.（衔接句：对through the city 中第一站Sunrise Street中具体表述以及目的） Then she asked me to pull up near a peaceful square, where,

17、as she told me in a gentle voice, she first met her husband. （衔接上文，去到第二站）She sat on the back seat still, gazing at the square through a mist of tears for a moment, and then signaled me to move on. All the way, I just listened attentively as if I was a loyal audience to my mother who used to call up

18、her good old days. （作者的行为：I just listened ， if I was a loyal audience to my mother who used to call up her good old days. 模仿原文风格，作者心理总是推己及人）After what seemed like a magical journey back to the past, we eventually arrived at the gate of the nursing home at dawn. （段落之间过渡句，说明以到终点站-养老院，引出付车费）“How much d

19、o I owe you?” she asked, reaching for her purse. “Nothing,”（模仿原文，作者的口头禅） I said quickly, shrugging with a light laugh, winking at the meter. As if she couldnt believe what I said, she looked at me with wide-open eyes. Then, her shock slowly gave way to grateful understanding. “Oh, youre such a good

20、boy! （模仿原文，老太太的口头禅，体现感恩）Thank you.” She held my hand tightly. “I just try to treat you the way I would want my mother treated,” I responded softly.（再次体现作者思想） “And thank you for sharing with me your best memories of this city.” （对话体现老太太感恩的性格）Then I bent over and gave her a hug. She held onto me tight

21、ly. A sudden warmth and happiness hit me like a balmy breeze gently wiping my face. And I knew it was the grace of kindness.（作者矛盾得到解决，精神收获） (257 words)4. 范文与分析二（来自于本小编） For hours, we drove through the city. What we first puuled off was Sunrise street. （回应原文）It was an old street where located small h

22、ouses but it seemed speical to the woman. Waching the scene , the womans eyes were filled with tears. “ I am back, all the things havent changed.”（表达老人家对过往的不舍） She took my arm and led me to a shabby building and said, “That was my shcool, where I have a colour life and met my best friends.” I looked

23、 at the woman still.It seemed that she were a student again.She singnaled me to move on. During the trip we went through Happy Valley , Honey Avenue and many other places which witnessed her life.（模仿原文的日出大道，制造了快乐谷，甜蜜大道等含有意向的地点）I had become the audience of a great talker with wistdom ,who was sharing

24、 her story.Finally , we got the nursing house and I stopped the car carefully.（体现作者耐心听讲，停车时小心翼翼的照顾周到）“How much do I owe you?” she asked, reaching for her purse. “Nothing,madam, you have paid it already” （强调作者收获）The woman felt surprised ,looking me in a gentle look. “You are shaing me a wonderful exp

25、erience.” I repied , smiling, taking her arm to help her to took off. “You are a kind boy.” She thanked me with excitement. She had given me a hug before she went in the nursing house slowly.For me, it was not just a hug , but also a feeling of warmth of helping an old woman in need.(利用拥抱这个意向，升华到帮助有

26、需要的人的精神快感！）2022年天外期中考The Pet LambAlmost all the possessions had been sold to buy food and clothing for the family. At last nothing was left but the pet lamb, Daisy. At the thought of parting with the little creature, Mrs. Grant felt sad because the children loved it very much. Having struggled hard,

27、 she had to make up her mind to sell the lamb. But she could not ask any child to go for the butcher. Finally, she went herself with a heavy heart, dragging her leaden feet, and bargained with the butcher for the sale of Daisy.While the children were all playing with the lamb, the butcher and his bo

28、y came to the door “You see I am here for the lamb,” said the butcher in a loud voice. Hearing this one child ran to her mothers side, and asked what was happening in alarm. Mrs. Grant gently pushed the child aside, bent down and was about to tell the truth.“Thats my lamb now, Charlie!” said the but

29、chers boy in a playful tone, going up to Daisy with a rope in his hand.“No, it is not your lamb. It is ours!” said Charlie, placing himself in front of it. But the boy, pushing him aside, threw a rope round Daisys neck, and began to drag the little creature away. The poor lamb bleated very sadly. Th

30、e cry of grief which fell Upon the mothers ears was too much for her, and her heart sank within her. In a moment, begging with tearful eyes, the children were all around their mother with voices choking with sobs for their little pet.“Please tell your boy to stop a moment,” she said in husky tones t

31、o the butcher. The boy, at a word from the butcher, stopped dragging the lamb, and the little creature stopped its bleating.In a trembling voice, Mrs. Grant explained to them how badly off they were after their father died. She also added that the kind butcher had given the money for Daisy. With thi

32、s money, she could buy her children bread to eat.注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.Para 1: But the more she explained, the stronger her children begged for Daisy. _Para 2: The butcher, who had been watching all, was touched in his heart. _1任务解读本测试读后续写试题所选故事的主题语境为“人间有爱”和“人与社会”，内容综合指向人与人之间应该友善，倡导友

33、善做人的选择可以带来更好甚至双赢的结果，体现孟子“赠人玫瑰手有余香”的美观。题目要求学生续写故事的发展（重在讲述主人公Mrs.Grant如何有爱的对待孩子，孩子如何有爱保护他们的宠物杨，并 补全故事的结局（重在讲述屠夫如何收到母子的感动而做出让步，用善良达到共赢）。2.续写要求通过阅读原文，准确把握并提取短文主要情节和关键信息，思考情节走向。具体包括：1）故事主要情节与走向 Mrs.Grant和他的孩子来自于一个贫困的家庭，现在面临出售家里唯一的宠物羊来换取生活资源，而孩子对宠物羊的保护和母亲对孩子的保护感到了屠夫，屠夫最后做出让步。 2）人物分析主人公：Mrs.Grant 身份：贫困家庭的母

34、亲， 特征：有爱，充满母性 情绪：纠结 ，低落 ，迫不得已屠夫： 特征： 直爽 善良其他人物：Charile为首的孩子们 特征：爱羊心切 屠夫的儿子 特征：粗鲁，顽皮 宠物羊： 悲惨人物分析方法（通过人物的动作，神态，心理，对话，环境等几个要求进行分析）l “Mrs.Grant”的分析动作：1. Finally, she went herself with a heavy heart, dragging her leaden feet, and bargained with the butcher for the sale of Daisy. (para. 2) 体现特征：心情沉重，无奈2.M

35、rs. Grant gently pushed the child aside, bent down and was about to tell the truth. (para. 2) 3.In a trembling voice, Mrs. Grant explained to them how badly off they were after their father died. She also added that the kind butcher had given the money for Daisy. With this money, she could buy her c

36、hildren bread to eat.(para.6)体现特征：有爱，充满母爱，耐心心理活动：1.Having struggled hard, she had to make up her mind to sell the lamb. But she could not ask any child to go for the butcher. (para. 1) 体现特征: 无奈，纠结语言：1.“Please tell your boy to stop a moment,” she said in husky tones to the butcher. (para. 5) 体现特征: 无助

37、l “屠夫”的分析语言 .the butcher and his boy came to the door “You see I am here for the lamb,” said the butcher in a loud voice. (para. 2) The boy, at a word from the butcher, stopped dragging the lamb, and the little creature stopped its bleating.（para 体现特征：直爽 ，善良l “孩子”的分析Hearing this one child ran to her

38、 mothers side, and asked what was happening in alarm.（para 4）“No, it is not your lamb. It is ours!” said Charlie, placing himself in front of it. （para 4）体现特征：勇敢 护羊心切5） 分析矛盾冲突矛盾冲突类型主要分为：人物之间的冲突，人物自身情感需求与现实得不到满足的冲突。本文两者皆有Mrs.Grant(母亲）的冲突： 对宠物羊Daisy的不舍与残酷的现实（如果不卖羊则换不来生活费用）孩子的冲突：无法失去宠物羊与羊必须要被带走的冲突屠夫的冲突

39、：付出金钱，必须带走羊与内心善良情感触动的矛盾6） 找到解决矛盾的对策，并在读写中体现（重点！重点！重点！）。在选择对策的时候，必须要符合人物分析时的特征，不能与“人设”相冲突。以本文为例：Mrs.Grant 面临着生活的残酷，孩子们必须不能饿，因此要解决矛盾，必须保证钱必须留在手中（所以如果学生在写续写中描述，最后钱被交还的话，则不符合本文要求）。而孩子对羊的爱以及做出的保护行为，必须得到母亲的安慰肯定与承诺，因此第一段的续写要求，必须重点体现出这2点。而最后，屠夫的矛盾解决为本文最不易把控的点。鉴于屠夫善良的人设，最后一定不能把羊带走（甚至杀掉），而付出了金钱，必须用其他收获而代替（可以是

40、一份助人为乐的快感，可以是换取Mrs.Grant的协助等等）。3.范文与分析（来自于官方范文）But the more she explained, the stronger her children begged for Daisy. “No!-No!-No!” they dashed to Daisy and threw their arms around her, begging, “please, mother! We would rather go hungry than lose her!” Hearing this, Mrs. Grant was in great sorrow,

41、 her heart bleeding. After all, she clearly knew that the children had devoted so much love to Daisy and that Daisy was more than a pet lamb to them; she was, in their eyes, a family member! Having struggled hard, she turned to the butcher and decided that she would not sell Daisy and would return t

42、he money.The Butcher, who had been watching all, was touched in his heart. When Mrs. Grant took out the money and gave it back, he just waved his hand and announced, “I will not rob the children of their pet! He approached the children, patted them on the shoulders gently and promised that he would

43、buy Daisy from their mother and then gave it back to them as a gift. The word left the children standing stunned. Then, looking up at him, one asked seriously, “sir, do you really mean that?” The butcher just replied seriously, “I mean every word of it. She is OUR Daisy. My boy and I will come to se

44、e her occasionally.” Hearing this, all the children gathered round and stroked the pet, their little hearts filled with joy. 范文与分析二（来自于本小编） But the more she explained, the stronger her children begged for Daisy. Charlie tried to stand up to untie the rope from their pity little friend with his broth

45、ers and pled to Mr. Grant, “Mom , We can not lose Daisy, she is the only companion of us after fathers death. We would rather be hungry!”（通过语言和动作描写，展现出孩子们勇敢，护羊心切的特则） Tears rolled down from his face.Witnessing her poor children and the suffering animal, Mr.Grant stretched out her hand, stroking them

46、and wiping off theirs tears, and replied,“No worry, boys , we will have Daisy back after we are better off. They will not kill her!”Even knowing that it could be a white lie and it was crue. Then she took up the rope and led Daisy to the butcherson with her trembling hands. （通过动作和语言描写，展现母亲对孩子安抚，对孩子护

47、羊行为的肯定与承诺）Making such a helpess choice put her into the greatest sorrow.（展现出母亲无助无奈的心情，为下文屠夫触动留下铺垫）The Butcher, who had been watching all, was touched in his heart. He attempted to lower his voice and announced, “Mrs Grant ,you are a loving mother , I will not rob Daisy from your kids.”（承诺留羊，体现屠夫善良）“

48、How about the money? I know .I should return the money but .”The butcher interrpeted her words and suggested,“I know it and you can surely keep both the money and lamb, would you like to come to help me ? ”（主动提出解决方案，体现屠夫直爽）Mrs Grant soon promised it and held his hands with gratitude. After hearing t

49、he words, Charlie and his brothers jumped with joy and hug Daisy firmly. They all learned that sometimes kindness can earn a better result.（最后分别描写孩子们和Mrs.Grant的反映，反衬出善良能够带来更好的局面的主旨）词汇激活1. Charlie tried to stand up to untie the rope from their pity little friend with his brothers and pled to Mr. Gran

50、t, “Mom , untie解绑 （对应上文Daisy被套牢）， pled to 恳求（上文beg的同意转换）Pitty liitte frend /creature/poor lamp/Daisy 用不同的词语来形容动物，更体现词语丰富性2. .Witnessing her poor children and the suffering animal, Mr.Grant stretched out her hand, stroking them and wiping off theirs tears, and replied.witness 看到 stretch out伸出 stroke

51、抚摸 wipe off tears 抹去眼泪手法上运用了非谓语与谓语组合的动作链3. We will have Daisy back after we are better off.be better off 生活好转 对应原文的badly off 4. Making such a helpess choice put her into the greatest sorrow.使用了无灵主语+有灵动词的组合5. He attempted to lower his voice and announced.Lower ones voice 压低声音 强调屠夫受感动后从原文的loud voice 变

52、为low voice的转变。【金题精练】Mike took the last bite of the chocolate ice cream and jumped into the car with his parents. They headed off to the Olympic sized pool for the big swim meet.When his race came up, Mike was confident. He was strong and swift and won first place, making him the fastest boy in his a

53、ge group.“Congratulations, said his father. His mother gave him a hug, even though he was wet. A week later, it was time for another swim meet and Mike decided to eat the same ice cream. He thought that it was his luck ice cream and that it might help him win again.He took first place again in his r

54、ace. Mike was feeling pretty good. Since then, Mike has decided to have the same ice cream before every swim meet and has always won. Several months passed and Mike was feeling unbeatable. Although he wouldnt admit it, all the ice cream was adding pounds to his athletic swimmers build.It didnt take

55、long before the luck ice cream had lost its magic. Mike started to slip to second place and then third place in his races. His scores kept worsening and Mike felt really bad. He knew what was wrong. But he couldnt admit it to himself and especially to his parents. He did not want to disappoint them.

56、One day, his mother sat down at the table with him and said, “Mike, we know you love ice cream，but maybe its not healthy for your body to eat so much of it. Your father and 1 think it is making you gain weight. Is it OK for us to quit the sweet treats for a while, especially before you go for the final competition? In order to strengthen your muscles, your father will go running with you three days a week. We think it will help you feel better.”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Mike unwillingly agreed._Finally the big competition of the season came._