Unit 6 Outdoor fun-2021-2022学年七年级英语下学期单元话题满分写作（牛津译林版）.docx

1、2021-2022学年七年级英语下学期单元话题满分写作 Unit 6：Outdoor fun单元话题：户外活动范文11下面是王冰的一次周日活动记录，根据所给的信息，请以第三人称He描写他的开心的事，字数80左右。A happy dayWhenWhoWhereWhatHow今天王冰和父母去公园/然后父母在公园在河边散步看起来开心王冰和孩子们在公园开始跑步不久累了，但是开心后来王冰和孩子们在公园唱歌、聊天/最后王冰和父母在公园带王冰吃晚饭美餐一顿A happy day_【答案】It was a happy day this Sunday. Wang Bing went to the park wi

2、th his parents. After they got to the park, they saw many people there. Wang Bings parents took a walk near the river. They looked very happy. Wang Bing began to run with children. They looked tired soon, but they had a good time. After that，they chatted and sang. Finally Wang Bings parents took him

3、 to have a delicious supper. Wang Bing enjoyed himself that day.【解析】本文属于材料作文，描述王冰周日开心的事情。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。亮点说明：这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，如with, take a walk, begin to do, have a good time, enjoy oneself等，增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。【点睛】写作时可以从以

4、下几个方面做起：认真审题。审好题是写好书面表达的关键。审题时要注意试题的要求，抓住要点，词数符合要求。构思提纲。有了提纲，我们就可以根据提纲和主题确定相关的写作材料。通常书面表达给出的话题是开放的，而具体的内容要求学生自己发挥，因此选择恰当的素材也是使短文中心突出、明确的关键。初写短文。一切都准备就绪，就可以动笔写作了，在写作的过程中我们要注意句子的准确性、连贯性以及简洁性。使用的词语、短语及句型尽量用自己有把握的词。同时还要注意使用恰当的连词，使句子衔接自然。修改润色。修改润色是获取高分的必要步骤。这一步我们除了检查短文的各种错误外，还要检查语法结构是否合理，有无重复、啰嗦的语言，大小写是否

5、正确，格式是否正确，词数是否符合要求等。范文2请根据以下表格内容，描写汤姆的几个朋友上周末所做的事情，可适当发挥想象。60词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。Toms friendsWhat they didTimeNancyWent to a parkOn SaturdayKevinPlayedbasketballOn Saturday morningSwamOn Saturday afternoonJulieWent to the moviesOn Sunday morningStudied fora testOn Sunday afternoonSallyHelped Henryclean

6、 the roomOn SaturdayWhat Did They Do?Tom visited his uncle last weekend. What did his friends do? Let me tell you._【答案】What did they do?Tom visited his uncle last weekend. What did his friends do? Let me tell you. Nancy went to a park with her parents on Saturday. On Saturday morning, Kevin played b

7、asketball with his friends. He went to swim on Saturday afternoon. Julie had a busy weekend. She went to the movies on Sunday morning. And she studied for a test on Sunday afternoon. Sally helped Henry clean the room on Saturday. They were all tired but happy.【解析】英语作文要注意人称和时态，注意提供的观点、材料，要注意句子的完整性，谓语

8、动词的正确形式，句子之间的衔接和过渡。英语作文，要忠实于材料，不必扩展，注意用好连词，多用非谓语，慎用较难的句型，一定不能写错句。范文3请根据下面表格提示，以“A camp”为题写一篇英语短文。介绍三班上周野营的相关情况。要求：1. 短文应包括表格提示的所有内容，可适当发挥；2. 词数60词左右。参加人员三班的全体师生活动内容去黄山旅游并野营，自带食品和饮料出发时间上星期六早晨7:30集合地点学校门口交通工具公交车感受.A camp_【答案】A campLast week, all the teachers and students of Class 3 visited Mount Huang

9、 to go camping. They took some food and drinks with them. They met at the school gate. At 7:30 last Saturday morning they set out and then they went to Mount Huang by bus. They climbed mountain and saw the cloud sea, enjoyed delicious food there. They all thought Mountain Huang was beautiful and the

10、y had a good time. They hope they can go there again.【解析】试题分析：这是一篇提纲类作文，也是话题作文，以“A camp”为题写一篇英语短文。介绍三班上周野营的相关情况。首先认真审题，认真阅读提示内容。根据内容提示，可知此文时态应用一般过去时。动笔前要认真阅读材料，列好提纲，不要遗漏要点，并适当发挥。要注意主谓一致，不规则动词的过去式等细节问题。写作中要适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。写完以后，注意再读一遍，看看有无拼写，语法错误（时态，主谓一致等）。（一）列提纲：Last week, all the teachers an

11、d students of Class 3, visited Mount Huang to go camping, took some food and drinks with them, met at the school gate, set out at 7:30 last Saturday morning ,by bus, climbed mountain and saw the cloud sea, enjoyed delicious food, had a good time.（二）连词成句，连句成篇。（三）再次阅读，检查是否有语法拼写错误。点睛：（1）学习中注意总结，牢记一些固定句

12、式及短语,写作时就可以适当引用,使文章的表达更有逻辑性,更富有条理。（2）根据内容确定短文时态，学生要运用正确的时态，运用所给或所学的词语，尽量运用熟悉的句型。（3）列好提纲和要点，及需要的重要短语或句型。（3）切忌堆砌词语，句子，注意运用适当的连词使句子流畅，连贯。 （4）注意书写的规范：大小写，标点符号等的正确运用。（5）注意检查：单词拼写，语法，动词时态，语序，主谓一致等。范文44（2021江苏镇江市外国语学校七年级单元测试）假如你叫张华，今天是星期六，你和同学们一起去森林公园郊游，在那里度过了快乐的时光。请根据提示内容，用英语写一篇日记，70词左右。要点：1.天气；2.目的地；3.出行

13、方式；4.活动包括野餐、放风筝、爬山等；5.自己的感受。SaturdayI had a good time today. _【答案】One possible version:SaturdayI had a good time today. It was fine, and I got to school very early. My classmates and I took a special bus to Forest Park at 8:30. When we got there, we were very excited. The mountain was so beautiful.

14、We could see flowers and grass here and there. The air was so fresh. The birds were singing happily. We flew kites and climbed the mountain there. At noon, we had a picnic together. Everyone took out delicious food and drinks to share. Then we danced and sang for a long time. Certainly we also took

15、many pictures together. We all enjoyed the nature and felt very happy.【解析】1.题干解读：本文是一篇日记。要求根据提示内容，介绍自己星期六的活动。注意要点齐全，可适当发挥。2.写作指导：写作时要以第一人称来行文，时态用一般过去时。日记要分别介绍天气、目的地、出行方式、活动以及感受。要保证语言连贯，无语法和拼写错误。范文5请你根据王华和他父母的旅行计划，用英语写一篇短文，介绍一下他们的行程安排。70词左右。时间行程安排5月1日坐火车去杭州，晚上9点到达5月2日去西湖游玩并拍照5月3日购物及品尝美食5月4日乘飞机返回 【答案】

16、Wang Hua and his parents will go on a trip to Hangzhou. They will go to Hangzhou by train and arrive there at 9:00 on the evening of May 1st.On May 2nd, they will visit the West Lake and take some photos there. On May 3rd they will goshopping and have some delicious food.They will go back home by pl

17、ane on May 4th. I think they will enjoy their trip a lot.【解析】这是一篇材料作文，根据表格内容介绍王华和他父母的旅行计划。时态为一般将来时，人称为第三人称。注意将来时态的构成为“will+动词原形”，写作中用到的词组有：go toby train； on the evening of May 1st；visit the West Lake；take some photos；go shopping；go back home by plane等等。适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。范文6请根据所给信息，写一篇题为“My fav

18、ourite sportbasketball”的短文，词数为80左右。My favourite sport-basketballWho likes我Why激动人心的比赛感到放松（relaxed）喜欢NBA球星如乔丹What benefit（好处）有利于健康使人兴奋What to do常常和朋友们在操场上打篮球How to feel一起打球时很开心对我来说学会打篮球很容易What to hope大家都喜爱篮球My favourite sport-basketball_【答案】My favourite sport-basketballMy favourite sport is basketball

19、 because it is an exciting game. I feel relaxed after playing it. And I like NBA stars and the best basketball players, such as Michael Jordan. As everyone knows，playing basketball is not only good for our health, but also makes people excited. In my free time, I often play basketball with my friend

20、s on the playground. We have a good time when we play basketball together. I think it is easy for me to learn to play basketball. I hope everyone loves basketball.【解析】这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少，如feel relaxed，NBA stars，such as，as everyone knows，not onlybut also，be good for，make people excited，in my fr

21、ee time，on the playground，have a good time等。而固定句型I think it is easy for me to learn to play basketball.和My favourite sport is basketball because it is an exciting game./ As everyone knows，playing basketball is not only good for our health，but also makes people excited./ We have a good time when we play basketball together./ I hope everyone loves basketball.等复杂从句结构的运用，丰富了短文内容，使表达多样化，是本文的亮点。在学习中注意总结牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章表达更有逻辑性，也更富有条理。【点睛】书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。