2023新教材高考英语二轮专题复习 专题六 读后续写（先技法 再完美）策略五“7-3-3”原则 精彩续写尽掌握.docx

1、策略五“733” 原则精彩续写尽掌握7个“不”1不增加人物由考纲样题及近5年高考真题中所给的段落首句可知，续写的故事情节发展都是由原文的人物所推进，因此，强行增加人物有可能会偏离情节发展。2不增加旁支情节题目要求“考生根据所给情节进行续写”，旨在延续原材料的故事情节，并不是要发展新情节。3不用过多对话在续写中展示对话，虽能丰富内容和语言，增强语篇的连贯性，但使用过多的对话，会显得篇幅累赘且很难在限定的词数里把整个后续的情节发展补充完整。4不用负能量结局结局设计绝对不能负能量。内容应该积极向上，能增长知识或传播正能量。如样题的结尾，我们可以有两种设定：这个年轻人就是银行抢劫者， 而Arthur因

2、此成为一个大英雄； 或者Arthur误会了这个年轻人是银行抢劫犯，但最终警察们还是表扬了他见义勇为的行为。5不在文末设置悬念题目要求是“使之构成一篇完整的短文”，若在文末设置悬念，就会给人一种还没结束的感觉，这样的故事是不完整的。6不偏离原文主题续写的情节应时刻围绕着短文的主题去推进，如上面的样题，由续写第二段首句提到的“警察局”可推测，我们可以围绕勇气及正义的主题去进行续写。7不违背逻辑常理情节和细节的想象要合理，符合生活常识及具有逻辑性。3个原则1原文一致原则续写内容要前后衔接，上下连贯，保持时态一致、人物一致、事件一致及语言表达风格一致。如样题中通篇短文基本都在用一般过去时，那续写也应使

3、用一般过去时。2曲折性原则凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏或矛盾冲突，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。但情节设计不能过于复杂或离奇，否则阅卷老师不能快速读懂你想表达的内容。3正能量原则故事内容一定要传递正能量，围绕“真善美”的大主题去设计情节，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃跑了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。3大步骤典例示范阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。2022新高考全国卷It was the day of the b

4、ig crosscountry run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest.I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old.

5、 His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasnt with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!I quickly searched the crowd for the schools coach and asked him what had happened

6、. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him，” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant wellhe thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wan

7、ted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the be

8、st of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the crosscountry team. It just took him longerthats all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, h

9、e did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2请按如下格式作答。We sat down next to each other, but David wouldnt look at me.I watched as David moved up to the starting line with t

10、he other runners.第一步精准解读文本语篇解读：记叙文 越野跑那天， 来自镇周边的七所小学的学生们正在热身， 而身体残疾的David独自待在篱笆旁，因担心其他的孩子会嘲笑他，决定不参加比赛。续写线索：主人公(David)遇到问题如何解决问题问题被解决，主人公实现了自我成长，完美结局， 呼应首段画面， 升华感悟。Basic elements：WhenIt was the day of the big crosscountry run.What (事件)David was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,

11、so he gave up taking part in the competition.Who (人物)David，I (a special education teacher)，the coachWhere (地点)the scene where the big crosscountry run would take placeWhy (起因)David had a brain disease .How (发展)第二步细读首句构思框架1结合对原文脉络和感情线的把握，根据两段所给首句中的已知信息推测新信息，合理推断续写框架。Tip1：两段首句定一框Tip2：二框二首正能量2兼顾两情相悦续写部

12、分情节线体现：David决定不参加比赛作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛大卫强烈的心理斗争David最终决定参加比赛。人物的情感变化线：(David)伤心(I)frustrated(David)determined第三步完成续写精细打磨续写语言，丰富细节描写一、细节描写学涉笔成雅续写部分应沿用原文语言特点衔接呼应，同时利用丰富的句式使续写部分斐然成章。1续写对David决定不参加比赛的心理、动作描写细腻，体现出David的无助、矛盾的心理状态。2在描写鼓励David参加比赛时，利用直接引语呈现人物对话，栩栩如生。续写第一段(侧重描写鼓励David参加比赛)1他低下头，尽量避免和我有眼神接触。He_hun

13、g_his_head_and_tried_to_avoid_eye_contact_with me.(双连动词)He hung his head, trying_to_avoid_eye_contact_with_me._ (非谓语动词作状语)2他咬着嘴唇点了点头。He nodded，biting_his_lip. (非谓语动词作状语)3仔细想了想，我提到了一些让人对他的决心和毅力赞不绝口的事情。Having_thought_it_over,_I mentioned some events which_won_peoples_praise_for his determination and p

14、erseverance. 4但如果你不跑步是因为你害怕被嘲笑，这就不是一个足够好的理由。But if_youre_not_running_because_youre_afraid_of_being_laughed_at,_thats not a good enough reason. (条件状语从句)5听了我的话，他终于下定决心要跑步，我催促他去起跑线。When_he_heard_my_words,_he finally made up his mind to run and I urged_him_to_go_to_the_starting_line(时间状语从句)Hearing_my_wo

15、rds,_he finally made up his mind to run and I urged_him_to_go_to_the_starting_line( 分词作状语)续写第二段(侧重比赛场场景描写和情感细节描写)6大卫坚定地站在自己的位置上，无视周围的一切。David stood firmly in his position，ignoring_anything_around. (分词作状语)7幸运的是，全场爆发出雷鸣般的欢呼声和掌声。Luckily, the audience burst_into_thunderous_cheers_and_applause8在热情和鼓励的鼓舞下

16、，大卫兴高采烈地加快了脚步。Inspired_by_the_enthusiasm_and_encouragement,_David quickened his pace in high spirits. (分词作状语)9他看到早餐时装出惊讶的样子。He faked astonishment when he saw the breakfast.满分结尾句(升华主题式结尾)10有了征服自己的力量，他就能征服通向美好未来的路上的任何事情。With_the_power_to_conquer_himself,_he can conquer anything on the way to a promisi

17、ng future.(with复合结构)二、利用适当过渡词， 完美成篇Wesatdownnexttoeachother, butDavidwouldntlookatme. He hung his head, trying to avoid eye contact with me. I asked him if he really decided not to run. He nodded, biting his lip. Having thought it over, I mentioned some events which won peoples praise for his determ

18、ination and perseverance. Then I quietly said, “David, if you dont want to run today, no one is going to make you do. But if youre not running because youre afraid of being laughed at, thats not a good enough reason. The real question is whether you are going to let those few people stop you from do

19、ing something you really want to do. ” Hearing my words, he finally made up his mind to run and I urged him to go to the starting line.IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners. David stood firmly in his position, ignoring anything around. But he had only gone a few metres before he

20、 tripped and fell flat on the ground. My heart sank. Luckily, the audience burst into thunderous cheers and applause. Inspired by the enthusiasm and encouragement, David quickened his pace in high spirits. It turned out that he crossed the finish line eventually. Seeing his confident smiles, I sighe

21、d in relief. With the power to conquer himself, he can conquer anything on the way to a promising future.练重点练难点创新应用体验2022山东省烟台市高三考前热身As a single mother, Ive never doubted my daughter Janes dream to be a singer on the stage. At an early age, she was crazy about singing. Whenever she had a chance, she

22、 would sing to her hearts content. Her sweet and charming voice tended to get people around attracted to her songs.Living in a small city, I took several odd jobs, determined to do everything in my power to support her. Soon after Jane attended school, her music teacher Mary noticed her talent by ch

23、ance and volunteered to give her some guidance on how to sing. Jane practiced so hard that before long she made great progress in singing.Unfortunately, one noon a year later, Jane was crossing the street when a careless driver knocked her down. She was rushed to hospital. When I hurried there, the

24、doctor told me that my daughter would probably not stand on her own feet. I froze with shock, feeling as if I had been thrown into a dark world. Weak and dizzy, I was about to fall to the ground when someone took hold of me.It was Mary, who got the news and raced here. She comforted me, saying firml

25、y, “Grace, Jane needs you. You must stay calm and strong.” I nodded. Having calmed down, I entered the ward with Mary.That night, Jane recovered her consciousness (知觉) and opened her eyes. Holding her hand, I said, “My dear, everything would be fine.” Mary comforted her gently, “I know you are a str

26、ong girl, Jane. Dont worry. Well be standing by you.” I was heartbroken to see tears streaming down Janes cheeks.After two months, we returned home from hospital. Her teachers and friends frequently visited her. Jane eventually accepted the fact that she would have to get around in a wheelchair. Nev

27、er did she refer to the subject of singing again. I knew she was a nice and understanding girl, who was afraid that talking about her original dream would upset the two of us.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2请按如下格式作答。One day, however, Mary came with good news.When the host announced it was Janes turn, she was whee

28、led onto the stage.参考范文：Oneday, however, Marycamewithgoodnews. She told Jane the school music festival was to be held the next month and that her classmates all expected her to sing on behalf of her class. Janes eyes sparkled but responded doubtfully, “Can I.？” Mary and I immediately assured her tha

29、t she could make it. In the following month, with the help of Mary, Jane kept on practicing singing. Beautiful songs echoed in our house again and smiles began to appear on her face. Finally the big day came when she could present herself.WhenthehostannounceditwasJanesturn, shewaswheeledontothestage

30、. Jane was greeted with warm applause. As she began to sing, the audience got absorbed in her beautiful voice.Seconds after her performance, all the audience rose with thunderous cheers. When wheeled off stage, Jane received praise and bunches of flowers from her teachers and classmates. Jane was moved to tears. The kindness and encouragement from her teachers and classmates stimulated Janes enthusiasm for life, making her regain confidence in pursuing her original dream, which I will support wholeheartedly.