2025版高考英语一轮总复习 写作培优 第2部分 第4讲 如何恰当结尾——结尾有章法课件.ppt

1、第四讲 如何恰当结尾结尾有章法技法指导在读后续写中，结尾发挥着至关重要的作用。除基础的揭示故事结局外，从表现手法上，结尾还应照应前面的标题和开头，完成整个文章结构。结尾方式很多，下面介绍四种常用的结尾方式：自然式结尾、首尾呼应式结尾、哲理式结尾和借景抒情式结尾。微技能一自然式结尾自然式结尾是指顺着文中所叙述之事的自然发展，以它的必然结果结束全文。这样的结尾很自然，给人单纯明快的感觉。【典例1】(20221月浙江高考节选)One day I got word that he was admitted to the hospital for a serious disease.I felt so

2、sorry to hear that and I thought I should visit him in any case.He was a little surprised to see me when I stepped into his ward with some flowers and fruits.I offered to do the rest work of our project and he invited me to share my ideas to perfect it.We began to work as a fine team and finally fin

3、ished our project on time.Our hard work paid off and Dr.Henderson was very satisfied with our wonderful findings.From this project,we also learned the significance of teammates.Just as the saying goes,one person can go far,but a group of persons can travel farther.分析：此段续写是基于上文作者在一次心理学课上被分配了一个不想合作的队友

4、共同完成作业共享分数，他们最开始无法配合，续写描写他的搭档住院以后他们是如何应对并最终圆满完成作业的，思路清晰，给人清新自然、顺理成章的感觉。微技能二首尾呼应式结尾首尾呼应式结尾指续写文章的结尾与原文开头互相呼应，这是一种在续写文章中比较常用的结尾方法。这种方式不仅能保证续写文章的前后逻辑一致，不偏离主题，而且还能唤起读者心理上的共鸣。【典例2】(2021新高考卷节选)The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.Opening her eyes,she couldnt believe what she ha

5、d seen.Before she could ask any question,their father turned up and told his wife about how the twins had made preparations to give her the surprise breakfast,and what trouble they had gone through when making the porridge and toast.Disbelief gave way to excitement and pride.Hugging them in her arms

6、,she said，“Thank you,children.Its such an unforgettable Mothers Day for me.”The twins were excited when they found they could do something for their mother.分析：原文首句是The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mothers Day.续写结尾时可以利用孩子们的愿望得以实现来呼应首句，以The T

7、wins were excited when they found they could do something for their mother.为结尾。这种结尾方式不仅能够保证续写不偏离主题，还可以增加故事的连贯性。微技能三哲理式结尾哲理式结尾是指在续写文章结尾时用一两句话总结全文的中心思想，并用客观语言表述，起到升华主题的作用。【典例3】I didnt know how to deal with the matter but luckily the waitress arrived out of breath.“Please stop fighting!Its my fault.”He

8、aring these remarks,all of us stopped fighting.The waitress explained that her mother became badly ill last night,which contributed to her fault.The moment she finished her accounting for the fault,she burst into tears.At a loss,the young man,my husband,I and even my kids tried to comfort her.Eventu

9、ally,we said sorry to each other.This special experience in someone elses room made me realize forgiveness is a kind of virtue.分析：这是一篇讲述作者一家在旅行途中在宾馆走错房间的故事续写结尾。最后一句This special experience in someone elses room made me realize forgiveness is a kind of virtue.总结了作者的写作意图，即“原谅是一种美德”。这种篇末扣题的手法是我们平时续写文章结尾

10、的时候可以模仿的。微技能四借景抒情式结尾借景抒情是指在叙述故事的过程中戛然而止，转为写景，以景代情作结，使得短文“此时无情胜有情”，显得意犹未尽，可以使读者在景物描写中体味到景的意境，驰骋想象，寓情于景，达到不言情而情无限、言有尽而意无穷的艺术效果。【典例4】On the eighth floor,I saw a man reading a book in the day room,who happened to be Michael Goldsteins.Cautiously,I slipped approaching him,slowly passing the wallet,and br

11、eaking the message from Hannah.For a long time,he just stared at the blank before him,merrily,sinking in sweet memories in the past.Then,something like a smile wrinkled the corners of his eyes.Old as he was,he stood up and stepped downstairs swiftly,followed by me.In Hannahs room,they hugged,tightly

12、.Balmy breeze wiping my face,a sudden warmth just hit me.分析：该篇文章的结尾借景抒情，情景交融，营造了一幅和谐温暖的画面，令人回味无穷。该续写结尾将人物感动的心情与微风拂面的环境相结合，当他们相拥的那一刻、微风拂面，温暖袭人是再自然不过的事了。这个结尾给人一种水到渠成的感觉，也让人明白爱，温暖人心。同时该文结尾方式与主题(爱)相称，融情于景，加深了读者的感受。即时演练根据汉语提示续写精彩结尾1开头：A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one da

13、y.结尾：_(运用首尾呼应式结尾)What a funny day!Arthur couldnt stop laughing whenever he looked back on this fabulous experience.2This was the scene just now.Out of curiosity,some passers-by asked Joseph why he didnt take it for himself since he was badly in need of money.Joseph answered，“It goes without saying t

14、hat if I took it in a dishonest way,I would succeed temporarily.But in the long run,I am bound to be a loser.”结尾：_(运用点题哲理式结尾)Just as the saying goes,honesty is the best policy.Therefore,we should bear in mind that honesty is the best policy.Writing 1阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Ellas First F

15、ashion CreationElla was wearing a new dress and she felt like a famous model.Even better,it was a dress she made!Her very first piece of fashion!“What do you think？”she asked her family.They were all gathered at the kitchen table for breakfast.“Its very pretty.I cant believe you designed and sewed t

16、hat all by yourself！”Mom said.“Im so proud of you!How long did that take？”Dad asked.Ella pulled out her chair and sat down.“Two weeks!But I think I could make the next one faster.I had a few problems.”Ella smiled.She had so many problems making the dress,but right now it was all worth it.It was goin

17、g to be a great day.The kids at school werent quite as excited about her dress as she thought they would be,but she did get some nice comments from some of the girls,so she was happy about that.The day went by quickly,and before she knew it,she was outside for the last break of the day.“What a perfe

18、ct day！”she thought to herself as she swung on the swings.The school bell rang and the break was over.When the swing was close to stopping,Ella jumped off.When she landed,she heard a loud rip(撕裂)She moved her hand to the back of her dress.It was ripped all the way down the back!Her very first fashio

19、n creation fell apart!Ella was so embarrassed.Ella spotted her teacher,Miss Miller,near the door.Ella took one hand from her dress and waved for Miss Miller to come to her.Miss Miller came up and looked at the back of Ellas dress.“Oh no!And it is such a beautiful dress！”“I made it myself，”Ella said.

20、“You must be very proud!You did a great job！”“Not really.Or it wouldnt have ripped.”“Well,that happens sometimes.Even with clothes you buy in the store！”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2请按如下格式作答。Miss Miller took off her sweater and helped Ella to pull it on.“We cant avoid problems，”said Mom.【参考范文】Miss Miller took

21、off her sweater and helped Ella to pull it on.She helped Ella up and walked her back to the classroom.As soon as she sat down,she heard a girl laughing at her torn clothes.Ella was very sad and felt very defeated.Miss Miller came to Ella and said,“Your clothes are very beautiful.You shouldnt deny yo

22、urself because it is broken.”After hearing this,Ella called her mother and asked her mother to pick her up.Because her clothes were broken,she couldnt walk home by herself.When her mother came,she saw what had happened and was distressed.“We cant avoid problems，”said Mom.“When the problem arises,we

23、should find a way to solve it instead of complaining about ourselves.Now your dress is broken and you just need to sew it.”After saying that,mother took out the sewing bag and handed it to Ella,who took over the sewing bag and nodded to her mother.Then she stitched up the broken part of the dress.Wr

24、iting 2阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Back in the early 1980s,the idea of home computers was catching on.I wasnt keen on getting one.Somehow,I evolved and have owned several computers over the years.Some days,I loved my computer,but more often than not,I hated it.I didnt grow up with them,and

25、they were a challenge to my mental health.Dealing with modern technology was my introduction to stress,and I know who to blame:my children.They werent satisfied that their dad and I finally bought a computer and learned to send e-mails.We were quite happy with that,but next came a cellphone.Then jus

26、t talking on the phone was not acceptable;they insisted we learn to text as well.We couldnt get a break.I remember well the night that Facebook became a household word around here.Those kids of ours were determined to set up a joint account for us.It took some convincing.We felt no guilt for grating

27、 on(激怒)their nerves considering the drama theyd sometimes created for us during their teenage years.A little payback wouldnt hurt those two.More recently,my husband and I were forced into getting rid of our flip phones and getting smartphones.I will admit that I progressed into appreciating mine.I l

28、iked speaking to Siri and finding out what I needed to know in an instant.I enjoyed having Internet access everywhere I went.I felt a sense of accomplishment;my husbandnot so much.To this day,he would happily take back his flip phone.Last Christmas,our children surprised us with yet another popular

29、form of technologyAlexa.The girls took our smartphones in hand and got us programmed.Before we fully understood what was happening,we could tell Alexa to turn our lamp on or off,and she would.To be honest,we were a bit annoyed at having to learn how to use yet another device,but we decided to keep i

30、t.We mastered turning the lamp on and off,and once again I got the hang of it sooner than my husband did.I became his Alexa coach.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2请按如下格式作答。One night,Alexa did not turn on the lamp when I gave the command.We should thank our children and grandchildren.【参考范文】One night,Alexa did not t

31、urn on the lamp when I gave the command.I tried to say“Turn on the light”to it countless times,but Alexa didnt work.“New technologies are always unreliable.”my husband complained.I searched the Internet and immediately found the reason why Alex couldnt work.I just needed to tell Alex to set the ligh

32、t colour to white or whatever colour I wanted,and then it would turn on the light.Then Alex turned on the light itself.We should thank our children and grandchildren.It was our children and grandchildren that taught us to use technology so that I could find a solution on the Internet by myself.Without them,our life is always invariable and boring.Our children and grandchildren“force”us to accept and use technology,which seems to put us under pressure.However,the fact is that our children and grandchildren let us really accept and use technology to make our life more convenient.