2022版新高考英语人教版一轮学案：层级4 第4讲　读后续写 WORD版含解析.doc

1、第4讲读后续写读后续写是新高考首次使用的题型。续写，顾名思义，就是在前文的基础上续写后文，使之与前文构成一个完整的故事。读后续写是读和写的统一，是对阅读能力、概括能力、思维转化能力、语言领悟能力和语言组织能力的全面考查。一、题型特点1总体特征 读后续写的阅读材料一般为350词左右的记叙文。考生要在此文的后面接着续写约150词左右的文字与前文构成一个完整的故事。一般来说，记叙文浅显易懂，但故事情节多曲折动人，故事线索的逻辑性也较强。阅读材料虽然是一篇不完整的文章，但是它易懂，内容能延伸。要求考生续写的部分多是故事发展的高潮或结局。2主要类别续写一般分为两类：半开放性续写和完全开放性续写。半开放性

2、续写要求考生务必根据文章的逻辑推理续写。完全开放性续写则要求考生依据文章的思路自由发挥。3具体要求写作的具体要求：一是要注意词数限制在150词左右，且分两段，这两段中各段的词数多少没有限定。二是要注意续写时使用的时态要与原阅读材料中的时态一致。三是要注意两段首所给句子的引领性和导向性。二、写作步骤第一步：仔细审题速读阅读材料和写作要求，了解文章大意，明确写作任务。第二步：细读全文阅读材料一般为记叙文，阅读时要迅速抓住故事的几个关键要素：时间、地点、人物、事件。前三个要素考生易于获取，至于事件，考生必须理清事件的起因和事件的发展过程。具体地讲，在阅读材料时要用笔在原文中标记能描述事件发展过程或者

3、表明作者态度和观点的关键词(主要是名词、动词、形容词和副词)，以备高效快捷地梳理故事线索。第三步：精心谋篇先仔细阅读续写部分所给出的两段段首文字，再构思这两段要写的段落大意。根据确定好的段落大意，然后进行续写，这两段加起来要能写出10到15个左右的句子，以满足续写词数的要求。第四步：初写成文按照第三步谋篇时确定好的写作要点进行初次写作。写作时要注意所用的人称和时态要与原材料一致。另外，还要注意尽可能地减少表达上的语法错误。如果遇到语言上的表述困难，可多参考原阅读材料中的有关语句。第五步：润色升级初写成文后，要对文章进行升级提升，用亮点词汇代替一般词汇，用高级句式代替一般句式。第六步：复查定稿完

4、成续写后，考生要根据以下几点做好修改润色。1续写部分与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度。2内容的丰富性和高级句式的使用情况。3应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。4续写部分与原阅读材料在内容上的连贯性与一致性。典例一阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。A young man was getting ready to graduate from college. For many months he had admired a beautiful sports car in a dealers showroom, and knowing his father

5、could well afford it, he told him that was all he wanted.As Graduation Day approached, the young man awaited signs that his father had purchased the car. Finally, on the morning of his graduation, his father called him into his private study. His father told him how proud he was to have such a fine

6、son, and told him how much he loved him. He handed his son a beautiful wrapped gift box. Curious, but somewhat disappointed, the young man opened the box and found a lovely, leatherbound dictionary, with the young mans name embossed in gold.Angrily, he raised his voice to his father and said, “With

7、all your money you give me a dictionary？” He then stormed out of the house, leaving the dictionary.Many years passed and the young man was very successful in business. He had a beautiful home and a wonderful family, but realizing his father was very old, he thought perhaps he should go to see him. H

8、e had not seen him since that graduation day. Before he could make the arrangements, he received a telegram telling him his father had passed away, and willed all of his possessions to his son. He needed to come home immediately and take care of things.When he arrived at his fathers house, sudden sa

9、dness and regret filled his heart. He began to search through his fathers important papers and saw the still new Bible, just as he had left it years ago.注意：1续写词数应为150左右；2请按如下格式作答。With tears, he opened the dictionary and began to turn the pages._How many times do we miss blessings because they are no

10、t packaged as we expected？_写作步骤第一步：仔细审题1本文的写作任务是读后续写。2本文是关于发生在作者和父亲之间的故事。3本文要求续写故事的结局和故事所引发的道理。第二步：细读全文1Time: Before the authors Graduation Day2Place: Fathers private study3People: Father and the author.4Event: The author wanted his father to buy him a sports car, but his father sent him a dictionar

11、y. The author left home angrily and didnt visit his father until he got the news that his father had passed away第三步：精心谋篇1续写第一段：作者在父亲给自己的一本词典里发现了父亲给作者买的汽车的钥匙及感受。(1)备用关键词：the dictionary, dealers, sports car, his graduation, his father。(2)构思要点句：翻读词典时，车钥匙滑落；发现钥匙附带的标签上的汽车经销商的名字、他的毕业日期和附言“已全额付款”；后悔当初没意识到包

12、装起来的父爱。2续写第二段：作者经历的故事所引发的道理。(1)备用关键词：regret, realize。(2)构思要点句：不要等到意识到自己做错了才后悔；不要因期望得到你没有的而毁了你所拥有的；要记住你现在所拥有的就在你曾经渴望得到的东西当中；有时候，我们意识不到我们拥有的好运或者是本可能拥有的，这是因为我们所期待的“包装”不同；也许表面上的霉运实际上会是等着你去打开的一扇门。第四步：初写成文Paragraph 1：1翻读词典时，钥匙从书的后面滑落。As he was reading, a car key dropped from the back of the dictionary.2钥匙

13、上有一个附带汽车经销商的名字的标签，就是销售他曾渴望得到的跑车的同一个经销商。It had a tag with the dealers name, the same dealer who sold the sports car he had desired3标签上有他的毕业日期和附言“已全额付款”。There was the date of his graduation on the tag, and the words “PAID IN FULL”4一位父亲给了他儿子伟大的爱，但是当他感到那种被包装起来的父爱时为时已晚。A father gave great love to his son

14、, but it was too late for him to feel that packaged love from his father.Paragraph 2：5不要等到意识到自己做错了才后悔。Do not regret until you realize what you did is wrong.6不要因期望得到你没有的而毁了你所拥有的。Do not spoil what you have by hoping what you have not. 7要记住你现在所拥有的就在你曾经渴望得到的东西当中。Remember that what you now have was once

15、among the things you only hoped for.8有时候，我们意识不到我们拥有的好运或者是本可能拥有的，这是因为我们所期待的“包装”不同。Sometimes we dont realize the good fortune we have or we could have because we expect “the packaging” to be different.9也许表面上的霉运实际上会是等着你去打开的一扇门。Maybe the bad fortune in fact is the door that is just waiting to be opened第

16、五步：润色升级1把要点3中的前半句改为倒装句。On the tag was the date of his graduation, and the words “PAID IN FULL”2把要点4中的前半句改为感叹句。How great the love a father gave to his son! But it was too late for him to feel that packaged love from his father.3把要点6中的hoping改为高级词汇。hopingdesiring4把要点9中的主语部分改成名词性从句。What may appear/seem

17、as bad fortune may in fact be the door that is just waiting to be opened.第六步：复查定稿With tears, he opened the dictionary and began to turn the pages. As he was reading, a car key dropped from the back of the dictionary. It had a tag with the dealers name, the same dealer who sold the sports car he had

18、desired. On the tag was the date of his graduation, and the words “PAID IN FULL”. How great the love a father gave to his son! But it was too late for him to feel that packaged love from his father.How many times do we miss blessings because they are not packaged as we expected? Do not regret until

19、you realize what you did is wrong. Do not spoil what you have by desiring what you have not, but remember that what you now have was once among the things you only hoped for. Sometimes we dont realize the good fortune we have or we could have because we expect “the packaging” to be different. What m

20、ay appear as bad fortune may in fact be the door that is just waiting to be opened.典例二阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。John Blanchard stood up, straightened his army uniform(制服), and studied the crowd making their way through the station.He looked for the girl whose heart he knew, but whose face

21、 he didnt, the girl with a rose.His interest in her began thirteen months ago in a library.Taking a book off the shelf, he found himself fascinated, not with the words of the book, but with the notes penciled in the margin (页边的空白)The soft handwriting showed a thoughtful soul and brilliant mind.In th

22、e front of the book, he discovered the owners name, Miss Hollis Maynell.With time and effort he found her address.She lived in New York City.He wrote her a letter introducing himself and inviting her to correspond (通信)The next day he was shipped overseas for military service.During the next year and

23、 one month, the two begun to know each other by mail.Each letter was a seed falling on both hearts.A romance was budding.Blanchard asked for a photograph, but she refused.She felt that if he really cared, it wouldnt matter what she looked like.When the day finally came for him to return from Europe,

24、 they scheduled their first meeting 7 pm. at the Grand Central Station in New York.“Youll recognize me，” she wrote.“By the red rose Ill wear my dress.” So at 7：00 he was in the station looking for a girl whose heart he loved, but whose face hed never seen.A young lady was coming toward him.Her figur

25、e was long and slim; her blonde hair lay back from her ears; her eyes were blue as flowers; her lips and chin had a gentle firmness, and in her pale green suit she was like springtime coming alive.He went toward her, entirely forgetting to notice that she was not wearing a rose.As he moved, a middle

26、aged woman whispered, “Going my way, Sir？”注意：1续写词数应为150左右；2请按如下格式作答。Almost uncontrollably he made his way to the woman, and then he noticed that she was wearing a rose._The womans face broadened into a big smile._写作思路与分析(一)仔细阅读，做好写作准备此题要求根据短文的情节和所续写段落的提示句来进行续写。首先，应通读短文，准确理解所给短文的大意。即：文章讲述了一个温暖的爱情故事。十

27、三个月前在一个图书馆里，男主人公John Blanchard从书架上取下了一本书，他被这本书页边空白处的字迹所深深吸引。男主人公知道了这本书之前的主人名叫Hollis Maynell, 于是他费了很大的力气找到这个女孩的地址，开始通信。不久，男主人公John就去海外服兵役去了。在一年零一个月的通信中，他们之间的爱情慢慢发芽，当男主人公服役结束从欧洲回来的那天，他们约定晚上七点在纽约中央车站见面。女主人公说她会穿着自己的裙子拿着玫瑰出现在那里。然而，一位妙龄女子吸引了男主人公John的注意，他完全没有注意到这个妙龄女子手中并没有拿着玫瑰其次，根据文章的故事情节，我们可以提出以下问题：Why di

28、d John Blanchard study the crowd in the station?Why did John Blanchard go towards the young lady?经过阅读思考，我们可以得出以下答案：He was eager to find Hollis Maynell.He thought the young lady might be the person he was waiting for.(二)根据提示，展开合理想象首先，根据续写部分的首句提示，我们可以提出以下问题：Who might be the middleaged woman?Why didnt

29、John Blanchard want to make his way to the woman?Why did the woman make a big smile?继而，根据故事情节展开联想。联想的内容可以通过相应的心理、动作、语言等细节和叙述等表达方式表现出来。第一段：当作者不情愿地向那个中年女士走过去后发现，她确实带着一朵玫瑰。John意识到这位中年女士才是他要等的人。那么，这时男主人公应该是什么样的心情呢？他是否感到失望？ 他会怎么做呢？ 是直接离开还是礼貌地和这位女士交谈呢？ 沿着以上思路我们可以这样展开联想：John Blanchard明白了这位中年女士正是他所等的人，尽管他很想

30、跟着那个年轻女子，但理智战胜了他的想法。因此，他走上前，礼貌地和中年女士打了招呼，然后拿出了那本在图书馆找到的书。寒暄之后，他邀请女士一起吃晚餐。第二段：这个中年女士的脸上展现出了一个大大的笑容。那么，她的笑意味着什么呢？或许她对于男主人公经得起这样的考验而感到欣慰。接下来这位女士会做些什么呢？她是不是Hollis Maynell呢？ 真正的Hollis Maynell又在哪里呢？ 沿着以上思路我们可以这样展开联想：中年女士说道：“我并不知道这一切是怎么回事。刚才走过的那个绿衣女孩恳求我把这朵玫瑰戴在身上。她说如果你邀请我一起吃晚餐的话，我就告诉你她在马路对面的餐厅等你。这是一场测试。”(三)

31、根据联想，编辑成文在续写的过程中要注意续写段落与所给短文及首句提示之间的衔接。思路要清晰，情节要合理、完整，同时要注意语法、句型及所用连接词的准确性。参考范文Almost uncontrollably he made his way to the woman, and then he noticed that she was wearing a rose.John Blanchard was disappointed to see the woman, who was over 40Exactly, she was the girl he was waiting for.Though he w

32、ould like to follow the lady, he stopped and walked toward the woman, greeted her and held out the book he found in the library.“Im John Blanchard, and you must be Miss Hollis Maynell. I am so glad you could meet me; may I take you to dinner？”The womans face broadened into a big smile. “I dont know

33、what this is about，”she answered, “but the young lady in her pale green suit who just went by begged me to wear the red rose on my coat.And she said if you were going to ask me out to dinner, I should tell you that the young lady is waiting for you in the big restaurant across the street.She said it

34、 was a test！” 典例三阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Just the other day, I was walking around in a Big Bazaar store doing some shopping when I saw a cashier talking to a boy who couldnt have been more than 5 or 6 years old.The cashier said, “Im sorry, but you dont have enough money to buy this doll

35、.” Then the little boy turned to me, almost with tears in his eyes.I bent down and counted his cash, saying, “You know that you dont have enough money for the doll, my dear.” However, the boy was still holding the doll in his hands very firmly (牢牢地)It was clear that he wanted it very much.Finally, I

36、 asked him who he wished to give this doll to.“Its the doll that my little sister loved most and wanted so much.I want to buy it for her.I have to give the doll to my mommy so that she can give it to my sister when she goes there.” His eyes were again so sad while telling me this.“My sister has gone

37、 to be with God.Daddy says that Mommy is going to see God very soon too, so I think she can take the doll with her to give it to my sister.” My heart nearly stopped.The little boy looked up at me and said, “I told my dad to ask Mommy not to go yet.I need her to wait until I come back from the mall.”

38、 Then he showed me a very nice photo of him.He said, “I want Mommy to take my picture with her so that my sister wont forget me.I love my mommy and I wish she wont leave me, but Dad says she has to go to see my little sister.”注意：1续写词数应为150左右；2请按如下格式作答。Then the little boy looked again at the doll ver

39、y quietly._The little boy smiled and said, _写作思路与分析(一)仔细阅读，做好写作准备此题要求根据短文的情节和所续写段落的提示句来进行续写。首先，应通读短文，准确理解所给短文的大意：听说妈妈将要去看已经去世的妹妹，小男孩想让妈妈给妹妹带去她最喜欢的玩偶；可是由于带的钱不够，小男孩买不到玩偶，又不想离开。其次，根据故事情节的发展线索，我们可以提出以下问题：Why did the little boy turn to the author?Why did the author say his heart nearly stopped?经过阅读思考，我们可

40、以得出以下答案：The little boy might want to get some help from the author.The author was moved by the boys story.(二)根据提示，展开合理想象1读后续写部分所给段落的提示句，推断故事发展的结果。续写部分第一段首句提示小男孩静静地看着玩偶；第二段首句提示小男孩笑了，并且说了一些话。由此推断，小男孩终于得到了玩偶；得到玩偶后，小男孩会说些什么呢？2根据故事结果，展开联想，串联成文。联想的内容可以通过相应的心理、动作、语言等细节描写和叙述等表达方式表现出来。第一段可以从这些角度展开：小男孩看着玩偶，会怎

41、么办呢？ “我”听了小男孩的故事会有什么反应呢？ “我”会径直离开还是帮助小男孩呢？如果选择帮助他，又该怎样帮助他呢？沿着以上思路我们可以这样展开联想：“我”会急忙从自己的钱包里拿出一些钱，然后提议和小男孩一起再数数钱；“我”悄悄地将自己的钱加了进来(动作描写)，结果发现有足够的钱来买玩偶。沿着以上思路我们还可以这样展开联想：听完小男孩的故事，“我”一时不知所措(心理描写)；突然间“我”想出了一个好主意。于是“我”和小男孩说自己学过魔法，看看这个方法是否奏效。然后“我”在他没有注意的时候给了他一些钱。我们一起数了数钱，发现不仅可以买到玩偶，甚至还有多余的钱。第二段可以从这些角度展开：小男孩得到

42、足够的钱后会有什么反应呢？ 也许，他以为上帝听到了自己的祷告；也许，他知道是“我”给了他钱，那他会怎么做呢？沿着以上思路我们可以这样展开联想：小男孩以为上帝听到了他的祷告，因此感谢上帝，然后向“我”解释了原因。原来就在前一天晚上，小男孩向上帝祈祷，希望他能给妹妹买到这个玩偶；而且，他还想给妈妈买一支白玫瑰，但是不敢奢望更多。不过，上帝还是听到了。(语言描写)沿着以上思路我们还可以这样展开联想：小男孩知道是“我”悄悄给了他钱，所以他对“我”说：“叔叔，谢谢你。现在我有足够的钱来买玩偶了。你就是一个天使！”然后，他抬起头补充道：“上帝一定是听到了我的祷告，才把这位好心的叔叔送到我的面前。现在不仅可

43、以给妹妹买玩偶，还可以用多余的钱为妈妈买一支她最爱的白玫瑰。”(语言描写)(三)根据联想，编辑成文在续写的过程中要注意续写段落与所给短文及首句提示之间的衔接。思路要清晰，情节要合理、完整，同时要注意语法、句型及所用连接词的准确性。参考范文1Then the little boy looked again at the doll very quietly. I quickly reached for my wallet and said to the boy, “Suppose we check again, just in case you do have enough money for t

44、he doll.” He said, “OK, I hope I do have enough.” I added some of my money to his, without him seeing and we started to count.There was enough for the doll and even some spare money.The little boy smiled and said, “Thank you God for giving me enough money！” Then he looked at me and added, “I begged

45、God last night before I went to sleep to make sure I can afford the doll so that Mommy can bring it to my little sister.He heard me! I also wanted to have extra money to buy a white rose for my mommy, but I didnt dare to ask God for too much.But he gave me enough.My mommy loves white roses.”参考范文2The

46、n the little boy looked again at the doll very quietly.I was at a loss at that moment, not knowing what to do.Suddenly, a good idea occurred to me.I turned to the boy and said, “I once learnt magic.Now, lets see if this can be of some help.” He said, “OK, I hope it will do.” I added some of my money

47、 to his without being noticed and we started to count.There was enough for the doll and even some spare money.The little boy smiled and said, “Thank you uncle for giving me money, and now I have enough money for the doll.You are an angel！” Then he looked up and said, “God, you must have heard my pra

48、yers.Thank you for sending this kindhearted uncle right before me.Now I can buy my little sister the doll she dreamed of.Best of all, I have extra money, with which I can also buy my mommy a white rose her favourite.Thank you again for giving me so much.”阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。We have

49、all heard the expression：“Remember to stop and smell the roses.” But, how often do we really take time out of our busy fastpaced lives to notice the world around us? I have reflected back on one situation many times since it happened and have learned several powerful lessons from it.I am as guilty a

50、s anyone of ignoring the world around in this manner, especially when I am driving on Californias overcrowded streets. A short time ago, however, I witnessed an event that showed me how being wrapped up in my own little world has kept me from being fully aware of the bigger world picture around me.I

51、 was driving to a business appointment and, as usual, I was planning in my mind what I was going to say. I came to a very busy crossroads where the stoplight had just turned red. “All right，” I thought to myself, “I can beat the next light if I race ahead of the pack.” My mind and car were in autopi

52、lot, ready to go when suddenly my absentminded state was broken by an unforgettable sight.A young couple, both blind, was walking arminarm across this busy crossroads with cars whizzing by in every direction. The man was holding the hand of a little boy, while the woman was holding something tightly

53、 in her hands that sling to her chest, obviously carrying a child. Each of them had a white walking stick extended, searching for clues to navigate them across the crossroads.Initially I was moved. They were overcoming what I felt was one of the most feared handicaps blindness. “Wouldnt it be terrib

54、le to be blind？” I thought. Without realizing the danger they were in, they were walking right the path of oncoming cars. I was frightened for them because I didnt know if the other drivers understood what was happening.However, as I watched from the front line of traffic, I saw a miracle unfold bef

55、ore my eyes.注意：1续写词数应为150左右；2请按如下格式作答。Every car in every direction did the same thing._Never noticing something different, the couple adjusted their route as they followed the coaching._参考范文Every car in every direction did the same thing.They stopped at the same time. Everything seemed to freeze. Am

56、azed, I looked at the cars around me, and noticed that everyones attention was fixed on the blind couple while no one got mad and none was shouting and yelling.Never noticing something different, the couple adjusted their route as they followed the coaching. Trusting their white walking stick, they

57、finally made it. As they went across the road, one thing struck me they were still arminarm. I was surprised at the emotionless expressions on their faces and judged that they had no idea what was really going on around them. Yet I immediately sensed the sighs of relief of all the other drivers at that busy crossroads.So, taking a moment to see what is going on around you right now may award you something wonderful.